麻烦各位帮我修改一下自我介绍,若有建议更好,

麻烦各位帮我修改一下自我介绍,若有建议更好,
Good morning,today I’m here applying for the accounting position.It’s my pleasure and honor to give my self introduction to you.My name is xxxxx,a senior of south west university of finance and economics,major in international oriented accounting.Our learning materials are the very edition as the Canadian students use.So I am familiar with English expression in accounting field.I was the chief of badminton student association with member of 150,and I took charge of the whole organization’s operation.At that time,I arrange assignments to 20 persons,including financing,advertising,training,holding competition and so on.So I experienced in organization and have high sense of cooperation.And I suppose I am also a perseverant person.When I was a freshman,I confront big problem in my major study,for the English words in the accounting book drag me into deep water.But at the end I overcame it,and got the scholarship.My weakness,from my perspective is,I always take action first,in the dilemma situation,rather than have a deliberately thinking.Because I think under that condition,too much thinking is wasting time and chances.So there were some failures,but I am also the person never step into the same river.
I have admired your company longtime age.The advanced welfare,and high sprite of technology pursuing attract me a lot.If I can get your acceptance,it would be my great honor.Thank you very much.
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(Ladies and gentlemen,) Good morning.Today I’m here applying for the accounting position.It’s my pleasure and honor to give my self introduction (introduce myself) to you.My name is xxxxx,a senior of south west university of finance and economics,major(majoring) in international oriented accounting.Our learning materials are the very edition as the Canadian students use.(are exactly the same as what Canadian students are using) So I am familiar with English expression in accounting field(the field of accounting).I was the chief of badminton student association with member of 150(150 members),and I took charge of the whole organization’s operation(and I was in charge of the daily operation of the whold organization).At that time,I arrange(d) assignments to 20 persons,including financing,advertising,training,holding competition(s) and so on.So I (have rich) experience in organization and have high sense of cooperation.And I suppose I am also a perseverant person.When I was a freshman,I confront(ed) big problem in my major study,for the English words in the accounting book drag(ed) me into deep water.But at the end I overcame it,and got the scholarship.My weakness,from my perspective,is (that) I always take action first,in the dilemma situation,rather than have a deliberately(thoughtful) thinking.Because I think under that condition,too much thinking is wasting time and chances(opportunities).There were some failures of course,but I am also the person (who) never step(fall) into the same river.
I have admired your company longtime age(for a long time).The advanced welfare,and high sprite(spirit) of technology pursuing attract me a lot.If I can get your acceptance,it would be my great honor.Thank you very much.
自己写的吧,整体还是不错的～