神马作文网英语语法确认,100分
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英语语法确认,100分
是像写报纸那样的格式...
语法不太确定呀 ,如果好的话还有加分哦!
Duckling Storm
Local dog attacked the duckling,Little girl brokenhearted.
A duckling was attacked by a local dog Jackie and died very soon after.This ducking belongs to a local girl called Adeline; she loves the duckling so much that she had spend most of her time with the duckling ,therefore she named the duckling PLT stand for precious little treasure.
Unfortunately the duckling was killed by dog Jackie,
But that’s not all; Adeline’s father caused PLT’s death because he wants to test dogs obedient.
After the innocent duckling had been killed,little girl Adeline was brokenhearted.She helped PLT to hold a funeral with her third brother Gregory.
Investigation：
From this event,we have carried on a series of investigations on 20 pedestrians.
96% of pedestrians say that it is fathers fault,he should know want is going to happen before he act it,and he should cares about Adeline’s felling.And a psychology mentioned that this could form children’s Imbalance Mood or Autism,because this is such a giant hit for a kid like Adeline’s age.
4% of pedestrians say that it’s also dog’s fault,the dog should have a certain control of him self.But a zoologist mentioned that the entire animal can’t resist temptation of new things,and if it’s an animal that’s wake then they own from the external,they will try to attack or demo the animal to show their status.
Interview with Gregory：
From this event we also had an interview with third brother Gregory,because he attended PLT’s funeral.He mentioned sympathy with Adeline,she cried so hard during the funeral.And he thinks a part form that is him faults,because he accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.
是语法确定 ..不是翻译啊
是像写报纸那样的格式...
语法不太确定呀 ,如果好的话还有加分哦!
Duckling Storm
Local dog attacked the duckling,Little girl brokenhearted.
A duckling was attacked by a local dog Jackie and died very soon after.This ducking belongs to a local girl called Adeline; she loves the duckling so much that she had spend most of her time with the duckling ,therefore she named the duckling PLT stand for precious little treasure.
Unfortunately the duckling was killed by dog Jackie,
But that’s not all; Adeline’s father caused PLT’s death because he wants to test dogs obedient.
After the innocent duckling had been killed,little girl Adeline was brokenhearted.She helped PLT to hold a funeral with her third brother Gregory.
Investigation：
From this event,we have carried on a series of investigations on 20 pedestrians.
96% of pedestrians say that it is fathers fault,he should know want is going to happen before he act it,and he should cares about Adeline’s felling.And a psychology mentioned that this could form children’s Imbalance Mood or Autism,because this is such a giant hit for a kid like Adeline’s age.
4% of pedestrians say that it’s also dog’s fault,the dog should have a certain control of him self.But a zoologist mentioned that the entire animal can’t resist temptation of new things,and if it’s an animal that’s wake then they own from the external,they will try to attack or demo the animal to show their status.
Interview with Gregory：
From this event we also had an interview with third brother Gregory,because he attended PLT’s funeral.He mentioned sympathy with Adeline,she cried so hard during the funeral.And he thinks a part form that is him faults,because he accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.
是语法确定 ..不是翻译啊
...原来是要看语法...翻译了半天...
有不少错误啊~不过为了尊重你原本的意思,我没给你改内容,只是纠正语法和逻辑错误哦
还有,感觉那位把你的文章删的好狠...总之语法就这样差不多啦~
1.Local dog attacked the duckling,Little girl brokenhearted
local和little前都应该加冠词a,duckling前也应加a而不是the,brokenhearted是形容词,前面应该有was.
2.A duckling was attacked by a local dog Jackie and died very soon after.This ducking belongs to a local girl called Adeline
jackie前应该加一个named,而且这句话太罗嗦,改成定语从句吧,A duckling which belonged to a local girl called Adeline was attacked by a local dog named Jackie.
3.she loves the duckling so much that she had spend most of her time with the duckling
had去掉,这只是在叙述过去的事,不要用过去完成时.整篇文章是过去时,loves和belongs好像不对.
4.therefore she named the duckling PLT stand for precious little treasure.
stand改成standing,是非谓语动词
5.Unfortunately the duckling was killed by dog Jackie
dog前加THE,JACKIE去掉
6.But that’s not all; Adeline’s father caused PLT’s death because he wants to test dogs obedient.
这句话表达的不对,最好改成The reason for PLT'death was that Adeline's father just wanted to test the dog's obedient.
7.After the innocent duckling had been killed,little girl Adeline was brokenhearted.She helped PLT to hold a funeral with her third brother Gregory.
innocent换成poor,little girl去掉,后面改成Adeline was brokenhearted and hold a funeral for PLT with her third brother Gregory.
8.From this event,we have carried on a series of investigations on 20 pedestrians
have去掉.
9.96% of pedestrians say that it is fathers fault,he should know want is going to happen before he act it,and he should cares about Adeline’s felling.
改成that Adeline'father was erring because he should think what would happen before he did it and he should cared about Adeline's feeling.
10.because this is such a giant hit for a kid like Adeline’s age
like改成in.
11.and if it’s an animal that’s wake then they own from the external,they will try to attack or demo the animal to show their status.
把and去掉,其实你这句话的意思我不太明白诶~逻辑有点混乱啊,告诉我你想表达什么,我再帮你改吧.
12.From this event we also had an interview with third brother Gregory
third brother去掉,有点罗嗦
13.because he attended PLT’s funeral.
这句与前一句不构成因果啦,去掉because
14.He mentioned sympathy with Adeline,she cried so hard during the funeral.
这句与上一句一起改成He attended PLT's funeral and expressed sympathy to Adeline because she cried so hard during the funeral.
15.And he thinks a part form that is him faults,because he accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.
最好改成Gregory thought that he also had fault because it was he who accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.用一个强调句~
有不少错误啊~不过为了尊重你原本的意思,我没给你改内容,只是纠正语法和逻辑错误哦
还有,感觉那位把你的文章删的好狠...总之语法就这样差不多啦~
1.Local dog attacked the duckling,Little girl brokenhearted
local和little前都应该加冠词a,duckling前也应加a而不是the,brokenhearted是形容词,前面应该有was.
2.A duckling was attacked by a local dog Jackie and died very soon after.This ducking belongs to a local girl called Adeline
jackie前应该加一个named,而且这句话太罗嗦,改成定语从句吧,A duckling which belonged to a local girl called Adeline was attacked by a local dog named Jackie.
3.she loves the duckling so much that she had spend most of her time with the duckling
had去掉,这只是在叙述过去的事,不要用过去完成时.整篇文章是过去时,loves和belongs好像不对.
4.therefore she named the duckling PLT stand for precious little treasure.
stand改成standing,是非谓语动词
5.Unfortunately the duckling was killed by dog Jackie
dog前加THE,JACKIE去掉
6.But that’s not all; Adeline’s father caused PLT’s death because he wants to test dogs obedient.
这句话表达的不对,最好改成The reason for PLT'death was that Adeline's father just wanted to test the dog's obedient.
7.After the innocent duckling had been killed,little girl Adeline was brokenhearted.She helped PLT to hold a funeral with her third brother Gregory.
innocent换成poor,little girl去掉,后面改成Adeline was brokenhearted and hold a funeral for PLT with her third brother Gregory.
8.From this event,we have carried on a series of investigations on 20 pedestrians
have去掉.
9.96% of pedestrians say that it is fathers fault,he should know want is going to happen before he act it,and he should cares about Adeline’s felling.
改成that Adeline'father was erring because he should think what would happen before he did it and he should cared about Adeline's feeling.
10.because this is such a giant hit for a kid like Adeline’s age
like改成in.
11.and if it’s an animal that’s wake then they own from the external,they will try to attack or demo the animal to show their status.
把and去掉,其实你这句话的意思我不太明白诶~逻辑有点混乱啊,告诉我你想表达什么,我再帮你改吧.
12.From this event we also had an interview with third brother Gregory
third brother去掉,有点罗嗦
13.because he attended PLT’s funeral.
这句与前一句不构成因果啦,去掉because
14.He mentioned sympathy with Adeline,she cried so hard during the funeral.
这句与上一句一起改成He attended PLT's funeral and expressed sympathy to Adeline because she cried so hard during the funeral.
15.And he thinks a part form that is him faults,because he accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.
最好改成Gregory thought that he also had fault because it was he who accidentally picked PLT out of seven ducklings.用一个强调句~