我作文不好,希望大家能给我提提建议修改一下,to be honest is ok,感激不尽啊

我作文不好,希望大家能给我提提建议修改一下,to be honest is ok,感激不尽啊
Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?Playing sports teach us lessons about life.
I agree with the saying that we can learn some about life from playing sport.The first reason is that playing sport can teach us teamwork.Teamwork is a important quality not only for a person,but also for a team.For example,In the 2010 South Africa World Cup,the Germans have embodied this spirit.The German team is not like the teams of England,Brazil,and Argentina,which have a large number of A-list superstars,but the members of the German team use their teamwork to beat their rivals one by one and earn respect.The coach of the Netherlands team remarked that the threat presented by the German is not its offense but its teamwork.I believe that people can be deeply affected by the spirit of teamwork they see in sports.
The second reason is that playing sports can teach us to use a normally attitude to face failure and win.Nowadays,most modern-day students spoiled by their parents.No matter what they want,their parents can give them and achieve their requirement.
But in sport competition,everything is fair.Only one winner.You must have enough courage and good attitude to undertake whatever happen.If you lose,you must learn how to become stronger rather than disappointed.On the contrary,If you win,you can be proud of yourself but cannot self-important.When we growing up,we will find life just like competition,we must have enough courage and good attitude to meet challenges and risks.
What's more,playing sports can stimulate our brain and body activity.Studies showed that playing sports can enhance memory and defend fatigued.Then we can have a good spirits to study and work.For instance,playing table tennis can improve our attention,playing basketball can make us physical agility and running can enhance their flexibility,leg power and the cardiopulmonary function.
In conclusion,playing sport can teach us teamwork and how to use a normal attitude to face failure and win.Beside,it is can stimulate our brain and body activity.
就是“What's more,playing sports can stimulate our brain and body activity.Studies showed that playing sports can enhance memory and defend fatigued.Then we can have a good spirits to study and work.For instance,playing table tennis can improve our attention,playing basketball can make us physical agility and running can enhance their flexibility,leg power and the cardiopulmonary function.” 这一段会不会有一些累赘呢，因为问题问的是Playing sports teach us lessons about life.我也不知道这段加上去是否合适...

在这里我只是改一下错误,因为文章好坏还得自己体会!
Playing sports teach us lessons about life中teach改为teaches.
I agree with the saying that we can learn some about life from playing sport因为第一句用的sports所以在这里最好用sports.
Teamwork is a important quality not only for a person,but also for a team.中a important quality应改为a kind of important quality.
The second reason is that playing sports can teach us to use a normally attitude to face failure and win.中a normally attitude应改为a normal attitude.failure and win 中的failure最好为failures win在这儿最好在找一个更好的词来代替!
Nowadays,most modern-day students(应加一个are )spoiled by their parents.
No matter what they want,their parents can give them and achieve their requirement.
中can give them 后应加宾语,比如what they want.achieve their requirement.应该为requirements.You must have enough courage and good attitude to undertake whatever happen.改为happens.
On the contrary,If you win,you can be proud of yourself but cannot self-important.中 but cannot self-important用的不太地道 最好写成and not to be self-important.
When we growing up(应改为grow up),we will find(最好加一个that) life just like competition,we must have enough courage and good attitude to meet challenges and risks.
Then we can have a good spirits(应改为sprit) to study and work.
playing basketball can make(应改为improve 应为后边少谓语动词) us physical agility and running can enhance their（应改为our)flexibility,leg power and the cardiopulmonary function.
In conclusion,playing sport can teach us teamwork and how to use(use在这里不太地道,最好用prsent _展现出） to face failure and win.Beside（加s）,it is(去掉is)mulate(加s)ur brain and body activity( activity是活动,在这儿应用能力一词ability)