神马作文网我写了一个英文作文,帮我挑挑错,有关于生日的
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我写了一个英文作文,帮我挑挑错,有关于生日的
1.When is your birthday?
\x0bMy birthday is on September the first.Don't you think it’s very interesting My birthday is the day of school begins .When my classmates heard about it ,they all laughed.However,I think I'm unlucky .Because my classmates' birthdays are during the summer vacation .But I'm not .
2.How did you celebrate your last birthday?
I was very happy on my last birthday .I held a party in my home and invited some friends and classmates.We watched TV,play computer games and played a very interesting game called “ stick nose ”.Someone cover his eyes with a scarf ,then stick the nose in the paper person’s face.My friends gave me some presents .For example wishing bottle ,coin box ,birthday card and so on.In the evening ,we ate birthday cake and long unbroken noodles .Everybody were happy.
Why did you celebrate your birthday that way?\x0b
It is because I thought this is the birthday tradition ,everybody celebrate birthday in this way.Even if it is very tacky,but can make everyone happy,I thought that’s enough.
4.What are you going to do to celebrate your next birthday?Do you want to try something different?Why?\x0b
Next birthday ,I want to try something different.I want my birthday is different with others.I want to make my birthday challenging .For example ,I want to make birthday cake by myself and make a piñata.It can make my birthday more rich and colorful .Don’t you think it’s a good idea?
请问我那个第一段
“ My birthday is the day of school begins ”.错没错
还有“Even if it is very tacky,but can make everyone happy”
是不是应该改成“Although it’s very tacky,it’s still made everyone happy‘
1.When is your birthday?
\x0bMy birthday is on September the first.Don't you think it’s very interesting My birthday is the day of school begins .When my classmates heard about it ,they all laughed.However,I think I'm unlucky .Because my classmates' birthdays are during the summer vacation .But I'm not .
2.How did you celebrate your last birthday?
I was very happy on my last birthday .I held a party in my home and invited some friends and classmates.We watched TV,play computer games and played a very interesting game called “ stick nose ”.Someone cover his eyes with a scarf ,then stick the nose in the paper person’s face.My friends gave me some presents .For example wishing bottle ,coin box ,birthday card and so on.In the evening ,we ate birthday cake and long unbroken noodles .Everybody were happy.
Why did you celebrate your birthday that way?\x0b
It is because I thought this is the birthday tradition ,everybody celebrate birthday in this way.Even if it is very tacky,but can make everyone happy,I thought that’s enough.
4.What are you going to do to celebrate your next birthday?Do you want to try something different?Why?\x0b
Next birthday ,I want to try something different.I want my birthday is different with others.I want to make my birthday challenging .For example ,I want to make birthday cake by myself and make a piñata.It can make my birthday more rich and colorful .Don’t you think it’s a good idea?
请问我那个第一段
“ My birthday is the day of school begins ”.错没错
还有“Even if it is very tacky,but can make everyone happy”
是不是应该改成“Although it’s very tacky,it’s still made everyone happy‘
你不冲的第一句话应该没错,第二句你改后仍不是很好,很中文化,在英文里这个连词表转折,你这句转折性不强