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Nowadays with the rapid development of life condition,more and more families a least have one car.
Traffic jam is the most noticeable traffic problems,now let's talk about it.
A recent survey shows that about 94% of people in China think that traffic jam will get much worse.It is enormous number here,and far more 33% of people think the traffic jam have already influenced their daily life.
The latest report of the traffic control department of China said that the number of automotive vehicle in China have increase rapidly in the new century.Some experts think that according to some situations of traffic jam in the most of the city,China couldn't afford the problems anymore in the future.
It is necessary to solve theses problems.On the one hand,if we are not going to solve the problem,it is mean that we have to suffer a lot of pain like wasting the traffic light for long and being late for work or school because of the traffic jam.It is obvious that none of us would like to suffer the pain.On the other hand,solving the problems means that it will obtain a better more economic development,for example,more fast of the traffic system more freight transport can be taken.
Some people think that the government should control the auto consumption.Some of the people think the government should stop supplying the parking spaces for free.Some of them think the government should begin to charge the congestion fee in the rush hour.
Here are my opinion:Firstly,To build a good and efficient traffic system should start from ourselves.
How I said that?It is evident that the less traffic accidents would occur if all of us observe the traffic regulations.I have seen lots of tragedies thousands of times through my own eyes,there are plenty of traffic accidents are factitious and avoidable.If all of the driver took more responsibilities to others and observed the traffic regulations.Those accidents wouldn't happen at that time.
Secondly,I think government should set more buses' line in the city.Such as schools,business district,public park,living communities.And at the same time,the government should encourage people to take buses.It is the easiest way and the most efficient way to solve the traffic problems.For example,if one morning,I am going to take a walk in the park,and the city where I live have a convenient bus system,I can just take a bus to go there and don't need to drive.So convenient,isn't it?
All in all,a beautiful and high quality of civilization city are not only depend on government's efforts,but also depend on our action,so let's hand in hand,to make the city,the country and to make the world more wonderful and more colorful!
Nowadays with the rapid development of life condition,more and more families a least have one car.
Traffic jam is the most noticeable traffic problems,now let's talk about it.
A recent survey shows that about 94% of people in China think that traffic jam will get much worse.It is enormous number here,and far more 33% of people think the traffic jam have already influenced their daily life.
The latest report of the traffic control department of China said that the number of automotive vehicle in China have increase rapidly in the new century.Some experts think that according to some situations of traffic jam in the most of the city,China couldn't afford the problems anymore in the future.
It is necessary to solve theses problems.On the one hand,if we are not going to solve the problem,it is mean that we have to suffer a lot of pain like wasting the traffic light for long and being late for work or school because of the traffic jam.It is obvious that none of us would like to suffer the pain.On the other hand,solving the problems means that it will obtain a better more economic development,for example,more fast of the traffic system more freight transport can be taken.
Some people think that the government should control the auto consumption.Some of the people think the government should stop supplying the parking spaces for free.Some of them think the government should begin to charge the congestion fee in the rush hour.
Here are my opinion:Firstly,To build a good and efficient traffic system should start from ourselves.
How I said that?It is evident that the less traffic accidents would occur if all of us observe the traffic regulations.I have seen lots of tragedies thousands of times through my own eyes,there are plenty of traffic accidents are factitious and avoidable.If all of the driver took more responsibilities to others and observed the traffic regulations.Those accidents wouldn't happen at that time.
Secondly,I think government should set more buses' line in the city.Such as schools,business district,public park,living communities.And at the same time,the government should encourage people to take buses.It is the easiest way and the most efficient way to solve the traffic problems.For example,if one morning,I am going to take a walk in the park,and the city where I live have a convenient bus system,I can just take a bus to go there and don't need to drive.So convenient,isn't it?
All in all,a beautiful and high quality of civilization city are not only depend on government's efforts,but also depend on our action,so let's hand in hand,to make the city,the country and to make the world more wonderful and more colorful!
括号里是修改的
Nowadays with the rapid development of life condition,more and more families a least have one car.
Traffic jam is the most noticeable traffic problems(problem,要不在the前加one of）,now let's talk about it.
A
recent survey shows that about 94% of people in China think that
traffic jam will get much worse.It is enormous number here,and far
more 33% of people think the traffic jam have already influenced their
daily life.
The latest report of the traffic control department of
China said that the number of automotive vehicle in China
have（改成has,主语是the number） increase（increased) rapidly in the new
century.Some experts think that according to some situations of traffic
jam in the most of the city(cities),China couldn't afford the problems
anymore in the future.
It is necessary to solve theses problems.On
the one hand,if we are not going to solve the problem,it is mean
that（去掉it is mean that） we (加will） have to suffer a lot of pain like
wasting（这里是waiting吧?） the traffic light for long and being late for work
or school because of the traffic jam.It is obvious that none of us
would like to suffer the pain.On the other hand,solving the problems
means that it will obtain a better more（去掉more) economic development,
for example,more fast of the traffic system more freight transport can
be taken.
Some people think that the government should control the
auto consumption.Some of the people think the government should stop
supplying the（去掉the) parking spaces(space,不可数） for free.Some of them think the government
should begin to charge the congestion fee in the rush hour.
Here are my opinion(opinions):Firstly,To build a good and efficient traffic system (加we) should start from ourselves.
How(why)
I said that?It is evident that the(去掉the) less traffic accidents would occur
if all of us observe the traffic regulations.I have seen lots of
tragedies thousands of times through my own eyes(前面已经用了seen,这里through my own eyes就是重复了）,there are plenty of
traffic accidents（用most of which 代替there are plenty of
traffic accidents,这样使文章语法更丰富） are （这些事故已经是过去,这个are应该改were) factitious and avoidable.If all of the driver
took more responsibilities to others and observed the traffic
regulations.Those accidents wouldn't happen at that time.(这是一个if的虚拟语气,因为你这是对过去这些事故的虚拟,所以你应该改成 If all of the drivers had taken more responsibilities for others and observed the traffic
regulations.,those accidents wouldn't have happened.)
Secondly,I
think government should set more buses' line in the city.Such as
schools,business district,public park,living communities.(前面这里可以合并 Secondly,I
think government should set more bus line in places such as
schools,business district,public park,living communities.)
And at the
same time,the government should encourage people to take buses.It is
the easiest way and the most efficient way to solve the traffic
problems.For example,if one morning,I am going to take a walk in the
park,and the city where I live have(has,主语是city) a convenient bus system,I can just
take a bus to go there and don't need to drive.So convenient,isn't
it?
All in all,a beautiful and high quality of civilization city are(are去掉）
not only depend on government's efforts,but also depend on our action,
so let's hand in hand,to make the city,the country and to make（去掉这个to make) the
world more wonderful and more colorful!
暂时看到这么多
Nowadays with the rapid development of life condition,more and more families a least have one car.
Traffic jam is the most noticeable traffic problems(problem,要不在the前加one of）,now let's talk about it.
A
recent survey shows that about 94% of people in China think that
traffic jam will get much worse.It is enormous number here,and far
more 33% of people think the traffic jam have already influenced their
daily life.
The latest report of the traffic control department of
China said that the number of automotive vehicle in China
have（改成has,主语是the number） increase（increased) rapidly in the new
century.Some experts think that according to some situations of traffic
jam in the most of the city(cities),China couldn't afford the problems
anymore in the future.
It is necessary to solve theses problems.On
the one hand,if we are not going to solve the problem,it is mean
that（去掉it is mean that） we (加will） have to suffer a lot of pain like
wasting（这里是waiting吧?） the traffic light for long and being late for work
or school because of the traffic jam.It is obvious that none of us
would like to suffer the pain.On the other hand,solving the problems
means that it will obtain a better more（去掉more) economic development,
for example,more fast of the traffic system more freight transport can
be taken.
Some people think that the government should control the
auto consumption.Some of the people think the government should stop
supplying the（去掉the) parking spaces(space,不可数） for free.Some of them think the government
should begin to charge the congestion fee in the rush hour.
Here are my opinion(opinions):Firstly,To build a good and efficient traffic system (加we) should start from ourselves.
How(why)
I said that?It is evident that the(去掉the) less traffic accidents would occur
if all of us observe the traffic regulations.I have seen lots of
tragedies thousands of times through my own eyes(前面已经用了seen,这里through my own eyes就是重复了）,there are plenty of
traffic accidents（用most of which 代替there are plenty of
traffic accidents,这样使文章语法更丰富） are （这些事故已经是过去,这个are应该改were) factitious and avoidable.If all of the driver
took more responsibilities to others and observed the traffic
regulations.Those accidents wouldn't happen at that time.(这是一个if的虚拟语气,因为你这是对过去这些事故的虚拟,所以你应该改成 If all of the drivers had taken more responsibilities for others and observed the traffic
regulations.,those accidents wouldn't have happened.)
Secondly,I
think government should set more buses' line in the city.Such as
schools,business district,public park,living communities.(前面这里可以合并 Secondly,I
think government should set more bus line in places such as
schools,business district,public park,living communities.)
And at the
same time,the government should encourage people to take buses.It is
the easiest way and the most efficient way to solve the traffic
problems.For example,if one morning,I am going to take a walk in the
park,and the city where I live have(has,主语是city) a convenient bus system,I can just
take a bus to go there and don't need to drive.So convenient,isn't
it?
All in all,a beautiful and high quality of civilization city are(are去掉）
not only depend on government's efforts,but also depend on our action,
so let's hand in hand,to make the city,the country and to make（去掉这个to make) the
world more wonderful and more colorful!
暂时看到这么多