1.Recreational Activities

1.Recreational Activities
With the development of society,people have different kind of recreational activities,such as doing some sports,playing computer games,going to karaoke or bar and so on.
The recreational activities play a significant role in our daily life.Because it can not only reduce pressure but also make people more hard-working after that.
But everything can be divided into two.If someone gives him over to it,it is likely to hurt him even make him not want to work or study.Such as playing computer games,if someone doesn’t control himself properly to play,maybe he gives him over to it day and night.As the saying goes a little play will please you,but too much of it will hurt you.
As far as I am concerned,to be a college student,we should make a schedule to study and play so that we can be healthier and study harder.
2.What Electives to Choose
Nowadays,many universities open different kind of electives for students to choose so that it can widen their knowledge unless their profession and public courses.For different reason students choose different electives.Maybe some choose it just because it can be easy to earn a high marks.And some think it useful and interesting.
As far as I am concerned,electives I choose are based on my interest and its particle.Last term,I chose Photoshop as I was interested in it very much.Through this elective,I’ve learnt more computer skills and know how to deal with a photo to become more beautiful.
In a word,I think that to choose an elective which we are interested in it could be more attractive and would be easy to learn.

With the development of society,people have different kind（改为kinds） of recreational activities,such as doing some sports,playing computer games,going to karaoke or bar and so on.
The recreational activities play a significant role in our daily life.Because（改为because,前面用,） it can not only reduce pressure but also make people more hard-working after that.
But everything can be divided into two（改为：every coin has two sides,很地道的说法）.If someone gives him over to（gives him over to改为is induldged in,更地道） it,it is likely to hurt him even make him not want to（ not want to 改为unwillingly） work or study.Such as playing computer games,if someone doesn’t control himself properly to play（去掉to play）,maybe he gives him over to it （gives him over to it 改为 throws himself to）day and night.As the saying goes（后面加个标点符号比较好） a little play will please you,but too much of it will hurt you.
As far as I am concerned,to（去掉） be a college student（a college student 改为 college students,因为你后面写的是we）,we should make a schedule to study and play so that we can be healthier and study harder（改为 harder in studying,因为and表示并列,前后成分应该一样）.
2.What Electives to Choose
Nowadays,many universities open different kind （改为kingds）of electives for students to choose so that it can widen their knowledge unless （改为besides 除了）their profession and public courses.For different reason（改为reasons） students choose different electives.Maybe some choose it just because it can be easy to earn a high marks.And（此处应该表示转折,应But） some think it useful and interesting.
As far as I am concerned,electives I choose are based on my interest and its particle（实用性practical,属于笔误）.Last term,I chose Photoshop as I was interested in it very much.Through this elective,I’ve learnt more computer skills and know （改为hknown,还是和上面的理由是一样的,and表示并列,前后成分一样）how to deal with a photo to become （改为make it）more beautiful.
In a word,I think that to choose an elective which we are interested in it could be more attractive and would be easy to learn.
楼主写的很好,只是某些小地方需要注意,加油哦!
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