神马作文网请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平
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请英语高手帮我修改下这篇作文,四级水平
During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.
As for such a question,different people hold different opinions,Some people believe that we should develop economic rather than protect eviroment,To begin with,the better econmy will benifit our contry,In addition,our coutry will become wealthy,Last but not least,The economic development important than enviroment protection.
As we all konw,every coin has two sides,The other people believe that the enviromental protection important than economic development,The reasons for this are as follows:one the one hand,From the protection eviroment,we can enjoy the fresh air,That is,we can improve our life quality,On the other hand,if our enviroment rule break,how can we live?
In my opinion,I am so absolutely in favor of protecting enviroment,the reason why protecting enviroment is they can let our people enjoy the truth life,only in this way,can we get satisficatory result.
During recent year,The topic of where economic development or environmental protection which has aroused public attention become more and more popular.
As for such a question,different people hold different opinions,Some people believe that we should develop economic rather than protect eviroment,To begin with,the better econmy will benifit our contry,In addition,our coutry will become wealthy,Last but not least,The economic development important than enviroment protection.
As we all konw,every coin has two sides,The other people believe that the enviromental protection important than economic development,The reasons for this are as follows:one the one hand,From the protection eviroment,we can enjoy the fresh air,That is,we can improve our life quality,On the other hand,if our enviroment rule break,how can we live?
In my opinion,I am so absolutely in favor of protecting enviroment,the reason why protecting enviroment is they can let our people enjoy the truth life,only in this way,can we get satisficatory result.
先把错字改了
四级作文怎么说呢,你这些表达很多都是从范文中选的,其中不乏中式表达,比如different people hold different opinions,every coin has two sides.但对于四级水平来说就这样了……
last but not least前面最好用first and foremost对应
你第一主体段逻辑混乱了,第一个和第二个理由完全说得都是一个,而且没有细节
第三个原因你这么表达就是错误的,而且也没说为什么,我觉得你想用的是thus或threfore.
不应该是from the protection environment,而应是by protecting environment.
that is应该替换成therefore.第二个主体段最后没看懂
最后一段太冗余,都改成简单句吧.
反正总体你英语水平很poor,模板和你自己写的一下就看出来了,建议好好复习高中语法课本
有时间学学新概念二册
没时间就背范文,四级作文的范围以及用词每一个几乎都会在范文中出现
如果你时间比较多的话,可以买托福进阶-初级写作,里面有很多地道的表达
四级作文怎么说呢,你这些表达很多都是从范文中选的,其中不乏中式表达,比如different people hold different opinions,every coin has two sides.但对于四级水平来说就这样了……
last but not least前面最好用first and foremost对应
你第一主体段逻辑混乱了,第一个和第二个理由完全说得都是一个,而且没有细节
第三个原因你这么表达就是错误的,而且也没说为什么,我觉得你想用的是thus或threfore.
不应该是from the protection environment,而应是by protecting environment.
that is应该替换成therefore.第二个主体段最后没看懂
最后一段太冗余,都改成简单句吧.
反正总体你英语水平很poor,模板和你自己写的一下就看出来了,建议好好复习高中语法课本
有时间学学新概念二册
没时间就背范文,四级作文的范围以及用词每一个几乎都会在范文中出现
如果你时间比较多的话,可以买托福进阶-初级写作,里面有很多地道的表达