神马作文网帮忙看一下下面的英语短文通顺吗?或修改一下,
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帮忙看一下下面的英语短文通顺吗?或修改一下,
Sunday July.7 Sunny
Hello,I'm Li Hua.I visited the zoo with my parents.We went to the zoo by bike.We saw all kinds of animals.There were many lovely animals.I love pandas,koalas,monkeys,dears...
I saw pandas were eating bamboo,koalas were climbing trees,monkeys were eating bananas,dears were sleeping...How lovely!
We were eating lunch in a restaurant.Then we took pictures.We went home at three in the afternoon.
I had a good time with my parents in the zoo.
I love pandas,koalas,monkeys,dears,< and more.
Sunday July.7 Sunny
Hello,I'm Li Hua.I visited the zoo with my parents.We went to the zoo by bike.We saw all kinds of animals.There were many lovely animals.I love pandas,koalas,monkeys,dears...
I saw pandas were eating bamboo,koalas were climbing trees,monkeys were eating bananas,dears were sleeping...How lovely!
We were eating lunch in a restaurant.Then we took pictures.We went home at three in the afternoon.
I had a good time with my parents in the zoo.
I love pandas,koalas,monkeys,dears,< and more.
I love pandas,koalas,monkeys,dears...
monkeys和dears中间 用AND,因为是最后两个词.
I saw pandas were eating bamboo,koalas were climbing trees,monkeys were eating bananas,dears were sleeping...How lovely!
语法有问题.SEE SB DO /DOING STH.
We were eating lunch in a restaurant
根据文章的时间,你应该在吃完饭后写的.
应改成 WE HAD LUNCH ...
如果可以加点连词更佳.
monkeys和dears中间 用AND,因为是最后两个词.
I saw pandas were eating bamboo,koalas were climbing trees,monkeys were eating bananas,dears were sleeping...How lovely!
语法有问题.SEE SB DO /DOING STH.
We were eating lunch in a restaurant
根据文章的时间,你应该在吃完饭后写的.
应改成 WE HAD LUNCH ...
如果可以加点连词更佳.