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Ture happiness
Everybody has his or her's great happiness.Some people think that life is only
money and power.Some people even took their own life because of they got poor or they failed on their career.But I don't think so.Of course everyone love money and power.So am I.It’s also good to have them.But you can still find that the life is beautiful without them,because you can still enjoy the happiness.
True happiness is easy to find.Happiness is a delicious dinner your mother cooked for you; happiness is your father’ protecting hand; happiness is when you know that your wife or husband is waiting for you for dinner; happiness is when your children are calling you “dad” or “mum”; happiness is when you and your best friend is talking heart by heart.
Happiness is also to be successful.
Some one told me a story about happiness,this story,you will find that it’ s useful for everybody in the life:A little pig asked it’s father:” how to find happiness?” It’s father said:Go ahead,and you will find the happiness is just following your tail.
After this man told me this story I asked him:How to “go ahead”?
He told me another story:The god once heard that people all over the world want to be successful,he felt happy and wanted to know what is to be successful for people.
So he asked some people what is success.The first man said:Success is to be rich as a rich man.The second man said:Succeed is to be famous as a famous man.All of them used the sentence:to be …… as ……
The god didn’t find the best answer so he turned to be a rich man,in a garden,he saw a woman was watching her child played nearby with smiling.The god then asked her:I am a rich man,who is more successful between you and me?
The woman answered:I am a good mother to my child,a good wife to my husband and a good daughter to my parents,you are only a rich man,so,
I am more sussessful.
The god then said:But I have more money than you,I can enjoy more wonderful things than you can.
"Yes,you are right ."Said the woman."But you cannot enjoy one thing that I have --the happiness,this is more worth than your money.
The god then turned to be a famous man.This time he saw some young men was talking together happily.
He asked them:"I am a famous man ,who is more successful bettwen you and me?"
One of them answered :"We lived happily .We can talk anything that we want to talk.But you have to talk carefully even to your best frends.
So we are more successful than you."
"But I am famous ,there are more people listen to my speaking."
"Yes ,you are."said the young man "But you can't share the happiness when we are talking heart by heart."
The god then understood what is successful and happiness.
Happiness is to be successful.And this kind of successful is to make other people happy and to fell these peole's love.This is the ture happiness
Ture happiness
Everybody has his or her's great happiness.Some people think that life is only
money and power.Some people even took their own life because of they got poor or they failed on their career.But I don't think so.Of course everyone love money and power.So am I.It’s also good to have them.But you can still find that the life is beautiful without them,because you can still enjoy the happiness.
True happiness is easy to find.Happiness is a delicious dinner your mother cooked for you; happiness is your father’ protecting hand; happiness is when you know that your wife or husband is waiting for you for dinner; happiness is when your children are calling you “dad” or “mum”; happiness is when you and your best friend is talking heart by heart.
Happiness is also to be successful.
Some one told me a story about happiness,this story,you will find that it’ s useful for everybody in the life:A little pig asked it’s father:” how to find happiness?” It’s father said:Go ahead,and you will find the happiness is just following your tail.
After this man told me this story I asked him:How to “go ahead”?
He told me another story:The god once heard that people all over the world want to be successful,he felt happy and wanted to know what is to be successful for people.
So he asked some people what is success.The first man said:Success is to be rich as a rich man.The second man said:Succeed is to be famous as a famous man.All of them used the sentence:to be …… as ……
The god didn’t find the best answer so he turned to be a rich man,in a garden,he saw a woman was watching her child played nearby with smiling.The god then asked her:I am a rich man,who is more successful between you and me?
The woman answered:I am a good mother to my child,a good wife to my husband and a good daughter to my parents,you are only a rich man,so,
I am more sussessful.
The god then said:But I have more money than you,I can enjoy more wonderful things than you can.
"Yes,you are right ."Said the woman."But you cannot enjoy one thing that I have --the happiness,this is more worth than your money.
The god then turned to be a famous man.This time he saw some young men was talking together happily.
He asked them:"I am a famous man ,who is more successful bettwen you and me?"
One of them answered :"We lived happily .We can talk anything that we want to talk.But you have to talk carefully even to your best frends.
So we are more successful than you."
"But I am famous ,there are more people listen to my speaking."
"Yes ,you are."said the young man "But you can't share the happiness when we are talking heart by heart."
The god then understood what is successful and happiness.
Happiness is to be successful.And this kind of successful is to make other people happy and to fell these peole's love.This is the ture happiness
改过的Ture happiness
Everybody has his or her great happiness.Some people think that life is only
money and power.(Some people even took their own life)?because of(of去掉) they get poor or they fail in their career.But I don't think so.Of course everyone loves money and power.So am I.It’s also good to have them.But you can still find that the life is beautiful without them,because you can still enjoy happiness.
True happiness is easy to find.Happiness is a delicious meal your mother cook for you; happiness is your father’ protecting hand; happiness is when you know that your wife or husband is waiting for you for dinner; happiness is when your children are calling you “dad” or “mum”; happiness is when you and your best friend is talking heart to heart.
Happiness is also to be successful.
Some one told me a story about happiness,this story,you will find that it’ s useful for everybody in the life:A little pig asked it’s father:” how to find happiness?” It’s father said:Go ahead,and you will find the happiness is just following your tail.
After this man told me this story I asked him:How to “go ahead”?
He told me another story:The god onc
Everybody has his or her great happiness.Some people think that life is only
money and power.(Some people even took their own life)?because of(of去掉) they get poor or they fail in their career.But I don't think so.Of course everyone loves money and power.So am I.It’s also good to have them.But you can still find that the life is beautiful without them,because you can still enjoy happiness.
True happiness is easy to find.Happiness is a delicious meal your mother cook for you; happiness is your father’ protecting hand; happiness is when you know that your wife or husband is waiting for you for dinner; happiness is when your children are calling you “dad” or “mum”; happiness is when you and your best friend is talking heart to heart.
Happiness is also to be successful.
Some one told me a story about happiness,this story,you will find that it’ s useful for everybody in the life:A little pig asked it’s father:” how to find happiness?” It’s father said:Go ahead,and you will find the happiness is just following your tail.
After this man told me this story I asked him:How to “go ahead”?
He told me another story:The god onc