老是麻烦改一下作文Creative artists should always be given the freedom

老是麻烦改一下作文
Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words, pictures, music or film)in whichever way they wish. There should be no government restrictions on what they do.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In the current society, we can encounter art everywhere such as in magazines, films, etc. . It seems that artists can express their own perception in their own perspectives freely. Some people, recently, hold the idea that authorities should not the ways in which artists want to express themselves. I quiet agree with the issue.
First of all, the restriction may weaken and lessen the force and advantages of the works in fantastic ways. The barriers of the art approaches will undoubtedly have a fatal impact on the outcomes and the influence.
By contrast, if there is no bans on art methods, the works will do well in many aspects. It is well known that art works can convey profound ideas of artists, meanwhile, it plays a crucial role in inspiring creativities and discoveries. In addition, the increasing pace of life makes people live under tremendous pressure, which is aggravating their minds and may lead to mental illness. Art works, like music, films as well as fictions and paintings can, for one thing, relax individuals’ bodies and ease their minds, for another, prompt people to pursue healthy hobbies and decrease negative behaviors.
Here is another pivotal function that can perforce well as long as there are no barriers on art works—promoting cultural communication and interaction between countries, as the transport of its own culture, not only does the work of art highlight its own cultural identity, but it acts as an ambassador to exchange emotions that enhance mutual understanding.
All in all, the government should not deprive the artists the freedom to choose their own express method. Moreover, it is advisable for authority to advocate art diversity.

Creative artists should always be given the freedom to express their own ideas (in words,pictures,music or film) in whichever way they wish.There should be no government restrictions on what they do.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Write at least 250 words.
In the current/modern society,we can/删 encounter art everywhere such as in magazines,films,etc.It seems that artists can express their own perception/s in their own perspectives freely.Some people,recently,hold the idea that authorities should not //谓语呢?the ways in which artists /want to/删 express themselves.I quiet/口语化 utterly agree with the issue/这个词是有争议的问题的意思,这里需要观点这个词可用point of view/standpoint/viewpoint.
First of all,the restriction may weaken and lessen the force and advantages of the works in fantastic/?这个词误用 ways.The barriers of the art approaches will undoubtedly have a fatal impact on the outcomes and the influence.
By contrast,if there is/are no bans on art methods/?chinglish这里可用creation,the works will do well//?in many aspects.It is well known that art works can convey profound ideas of artists,/.Meanwhile/M,it plays a crucial role in inspiring creativities and discoveries.In addition,the increasing/accelerating pace of life makes people live under tremendous pressure,which is aggravating their minds/搭配不当,可改为stressing and may lead to mental illness.Art works,like music,films as well as fictions and paintings can,for one thing,relax individuals’ bodies and ease their minds/搭配不当,ease the stress of their minds,for another,prompt people to pursue healthy hobbies and decrease/不及物动词,这里减少可用reduce,或者cause a significant decrease of negative behaviors.
Here is another pivotal function that can perforce well as long as there are no barriers/restrictions on art works/works of arts—promoting cultural communication and interaction between countries/nations这里文化强调民族国家,as the/删 transport of its own culture,not only does the work of art highlight its own cultural identity,but it acts as an ambassador to exchange/exchanging emotions that enhance mutual understanding.
All in all,the government should not deprive the artists the freedom to choose their own /express method/ways of art creation.Moreover/末段最好不要用这个词,实际上文章逻辑清楚的话没有必要非要用连接词,你可以看下新三的文章,你能看到的最多有一两个however什么的,但文章依然很连贯,it is advisable for authority/ies to advocate/promote/encourage art diversity.
这篇大约在4.5-5.5之间,优点是架构合理,基本语法错误少,有几个大词用的很不错如pivotal,缺点是很多用词搭配用法都是不合适的,再一个就是冠词用法的问题,由于你时间有限,建议多背些现成的模板—包含高级词汇和句型的,如it is an unassailable argument that ….用来引导一个观点,另外,如果要用高级词汇,一定要弄清其具体用法,这点很重要,否则,弄巧成拙.如果改进得力,运气不错的话,上6也是可能的.