英语句子改错1.People always tend to chase their happiness delibera

英语句子改错
1.People always tend to chase their happiness deliberately.[低频警示] chase...happiness 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
2.Some persons struggled their lives to attain their gratification,but eventually found the gratification was in the process that they did not enjoy it.
{句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[动词错误] 动词 struggle 后面建议添加介词 for 动词 struggle 和名词 life 中间的介词分布好评报错
[低频警示] attain...gratification 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
3.Some would feel happy when got high score,some would feel happy when admitted by good schools,some would feel happy when achieve in career
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[名词错误] high score 前面冠词缺失
[低频警示] when achieve in career 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] admitted by good schools 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] some would feel happy 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
4.Actually,when experienced arduous striving,one may
understand the implication of happiness and will cherish their joyful
life.
[教师点评][低频警示] arduous striving ,the implication of happiness ,experienced arduous striving 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
5There'san old proverb,"Money can cure hunger,but it can't cure happiness "which simply means wealth can buy us some material things but can't make us happy and unrestrained from sadness and worries.
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[低频警示] cure...happiness 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
6.So,I firmly believe that if we always have happiness,we'll never give up the belief to life.
[教师点评][句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!好评报错[连词错误]
连词错误,建议将动词+that+连接词+从句改为动词+连接词+从句.
将上面这些改成语法正确的句子.如果是低频词汇的把其换成高频词汇,可以写同义句但不要改变句子的意思.

看了一下,有点吓人.大词太多了,其实很多比较简单的词用对了效果也不错.比大词简单的罗列好很多.切记写作文不要中译英,而是下笔就是英语.很多中式英语就这么出来的.
然后...我在改的时候,有些重写了,但是大意都没变,而且翻译在下面.
有问题追问.还有.写的我累死了好么,求追加分数.
1.People always tend to pursue their happiness deliberately.
人们总是会谨慎地追求幸福.
2.Some people take a lifetime to find their gratification which is missed on their ways pursueing it.
有些人倾尽一生去追求幸福,但是最后发现幸福就在他们所追寻的道路上,已然错过.
3.People may feel happy when they get a good score or be admitted by a prestigious school or when they make achievements in their careers.
人们可能会在取得好成绩或者是被好学校录取亦或是在事业上取得成就时会非常开心.
4.After some struggle,we can get what true happiness is and cherish the coming daily lifes.
实际上,当经历了艰苦奋斗,人们可能理解幸福的含义,并将珍惜自己的快乐生活.
5.As the old proverb goes,"Money can cure hunger,but it can't cure happiness ".It tells us that money can only get us satistaction in materials but not sentimental ones.
俗话说得好,钱能让我们填饱肚子,但是带不来幸福.这告诉我们,钱只能带给我们物质上的满足而非感情上的满足.
6.I firmly believe we will be nourished to lift our lives if we feel hapiness all the time,consequently.
因此,我坚信如果我们时时刻刻感受到幸福,我们将能燃起生活的希望.
（这句句子我觉得写得不好.怎么感到幸福就能燃起生活的希望了...又不是得绝症..）