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请专业人士帮我修改一下这篇英语作文。
题目：
假如你是班级里的生活委员，你发现班级里有些同学的生活习惯不是很健康。请你根据下面的提示写一篇70字左右的短文，为同学们如何养成健康的饮食习惯提些建议。
提示：
不良的饮食习惯 建议
不吃早餐 保证一日三餐
爱吃零食 远离垃圾食品
不吃水果.蔬菜 饮食均衡
很少运动 每周参加三至四次体育活动
原文：
I find that some students in our class don’t
have healthy eating hobby.Now,let me tell you some advice about how to keep
healthy eating hobby.
Some students don’t like eating
breakfast,they think it’s not important.But many scientists say that,”eating
breakfast is the most important.”And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.
I think we should be away from the junk food
and eat more fruit and vegetables to keep healthy.
And many
students exercise few times.We should play sports three to four times a week.
题目：
假如你是班级里的生活委员，你发现班级里有些同学的生活习惯不是很健康。请你根据下面的提示写一篇70字左右的短文，为同学们如何养成健康的饮食习惯提些建议。
提示：
不良的饮食习惯 建议
不吃早餐 保证一日三餐
爱吃零食 远离垃圾食品
不吃水果.蔬菜 饮食均衡
很少运动 每周参加三至四次体育活动
原文：
I find that some students in our class don’t
have healthy eating hobby.Now,let me tell you some advice about how to keep
healthy eating hobby.
Some students don’t like eating
breakfast,they think it’s not important.But many scientists say that,”eating
breakfast is the most important.”And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.
I think we should be away from the junk food
and eat more fruit and vegetables to keep healthy.
And many
students exercise few times.We should play sports three to four times a week.
初中你这个水平就不错了,但是hobby这个词不要滥用,我给你来个大学水平的.
As a staunch advocate of healthier living, I find many students in my class developed bad eating habits which I'd like to address by providing some useful advices.
Many students often skip their breakfast and believe it is fine to compensate by having more lunch which is actually not the case. Eating three meal with appropriate amount and on time is crucial for healthy living. Also a lot of my peers like eating snacks and fast food owing to their good taste which, as most adults are aware of, is complete wrong. According to World Health Organization, a balanced diet should include at least moderate serves of fruit and vegetables.
Last but not least, many students rarely participate any sports or physical activities based on the excuse that they can concentrate on their study. But the truth is exercise regularly, which means at least three or four times a week, can improve one's efficiency of learning enormously. Just like the older generation believed "A healthy body is the foundation for everything!"
再问： 其实我希望宁能从拼写错误、知识点、词语及语法等方面评改做详细的点评，因为我还处于英语初学基础阶段，您写的有些东西我实在看不懂，对我目前学习没有太大帮助，如果您愿意接受我的建议继续评改的话，真是太感谢了。麻烦您了！
再答： I find that some students in our class don’t
have healthy eating hobby.Now,let me tell you some advice about how to keep
healthy eating hobby.
大问题没有,这里要用habit 不能用hobby 建议你看看字典里这两个词的解释
Some students don’t like eating
breakfast,they think it’s not important.But many scientists say that,”eating
breakfast is the most important.”And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.
大问题还是没有,但是中式表达太多,比如And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.可以改成 A decent breakfast is great to start with the day, so we should keep up the good habit of eating breakfast on time.
As a staunch advocate of healthier living, I find many students in my class developed bad eating habits which I'd like to address by providing some useful advices.
Many students often skip their breakfast and believe it is fine to compensate by having more lunch which is actually not the case. Eating three meal with appropriate amount and on time is crucial for healthy living. Also a lot of my peers like eating snacks and fast food owing to their good taste which, as most adults are aware of, is complete wrong. According to World Health Organization, a balanced diet should include at least moderate serves of fruit and vegetables.
Last but not least, many students rarely participate any sports or physical activities based on the excuse that they can concentrate on their study. But the truth is exercise regularly, which means at least three or four times a week, can improve one's efficiency of learning enormously. Just like the older generation believed "A healthy body is the foundation for everything!"
再问： 其实我希望宁能从拼写错误、知识点、词语及语法等方面评改做详细的点评，因为我还处于英语初学基础阶段，您写的有些东西我实在看不懂，对我目前学习没有太大帮助，如果您愿意接受我的建议继续评改的话，真是太感谢了。麻烦您了！
再答： I find that some students in our class don’t
have healthy eating hobby.Now,let me tell you some advice about how to keep
healthy eating hobby.
大问题没有,这里要用habit 不能用hobby 建议你看看字典里这两个词的解释
Some students don’t like eating
breakfast,they think it’s not important.But many scientists say that,”eating
breakfast is the most important.”And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.
大问题还是没有,但是中式表达太多,比如And a good breakfast can help us have a good
begin in this day.So we must keep on eating three meals every day.可以改成 A decent breakfast is great to start with the day, so we should keep up the good habit of eating breakfast on time.