帮忙修改托福作文!题目是 多读books about real events 还是novels

帮忙修改托福作文!题目是 多读books about real events 还是novels
As an indispensable part of life, books of all kinds bring many benefits, some people find novels more interesting and enjoyable. However, books of real events influence people in a more essential way.
First, reading books about real events can better people's decision-making skill. When in a dilemma, people can analyse both the good and the bad effects through the true stories of other people from the history books. Since they can think considerately as well as wisely, they will always make the best choice. For instance, if you are struggling whether to tell a lie to protest yourself or to tell the truth even though get punishment. Considering the folklore of George Washington and the cherry tree. I'm sure it will inspire you on what to do.
Second, reading books about real events are shortcuts to success. Life is limited. We can not try everything and learn from our fallings. So why don’t we learn about others’ experiences and make the right choices. It will certainly pave our way to success while avoid much unessassary mistakes.
Adimittedly, reading novels is a more relaxing and interesting thing to do, especially in nowadys—an ever-increasing pressure society. It certainly is a good way to escape from the heavy study and endless work, we get good relaxation from it. However, we can not learn as much as from the books about real events.
To sum up, reading books about real is more significant, for we can make better decision and get to success easily.

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