帮我修改一篇英文作文These days it seems that more university students

帮我修改一篇英文作文
These days it seems that more university students are having a girlfriend or boyfriend than ever before.Therefore,many people hold widely different views on the issue of whether it does well to students.The reasons for this are twofold.
Proponents of the view believe that having a lover in university meets a lot of advantages.Firstly,in order to find a suitable partner who can keep our company and take care of us for a long time,it is essential for us to have such a wonderful relationship with some people.Secondly,your lover is your forever friend.Whatever situation you encounter,he or she will help you without any consideration.For instance,if you want to eat something without going out,call him and then he will soon take a delicious meal behind your door.And,however sorrowful a matter is,you can bear your heart to him.I am certain that he will listen to all your troubles quite patiently.Fourthly and more importantly,we can develop a sense of responsibility while we have a lover.I can think of no better illustration of the idea than the example of having a baby.Young as the lovers,it is essential for them to bring up the child.Thirdly,
Opponents of this view argue that the students lose various things while they are falling in love.The most significant effect is that we lose our freedom as dating becomes a vital part in our life.Virtually every time we are hanging out with our lover.On the other hand,although college students are physically mature,they are not mentally and emotionally adult enough to take the responsibility of marriage.In the third place,to our college students,more things are more important than marriage,such as study,work,fulfilling the goal of life,to name but a few.Last but not the least,the one you love in college may not be your suitable "better half" and an early marriage during college life is not always a wise one.Easier you get married,easier you divorced.
From my personal perspective,I prefer to the later view.As far as I mentioned before,marriage is only part of life,not all of it.For university students,the main task is to study and get fully prepared before stepping into this competitive society.

These days it seems that more university students are having a girlfriend or boyfriend than ever before. (These days, there are more university students being in a relationship than ever before.) Therefore, many people hold widely different views on the issue of whether it does well to students. The reasons for this are twofold. (I’m not sure what do you mean by saying this sentence, but it seems that English does have such kind of saying. My advice is to change into “There are both advantages and disadvantages”)
Proponents of the view believe that having a lover in university meets a lot of advantages. Firstly, in order to find a suitable partner who can keep our company and take care of us for a long time, it is essential for us to have such a wonderful relationship with some people. (Firstly, it’s wonderful to find a suitable partner who can keep company and take care of each other for a long time.)
Secondly, your lover is your forever friend. Whatever situation you encounter, he or she will help you without any consideration.(without hesitaion) For instance, if you want to eat something without going out, call him and then he will soon take a delicious meal behind your door. And, however sorrowful a matter is, you can bear your heart to him. I am certain that he will listen to all your troubles quite patiently. (It is certain that he will be a good listener to you with great patient and gentle.) Fourthly and more importantly, (Finally and foremost) we can develop a sense of responsibility while we are in relationship. I can think of no better illustration of the idea than the example of having a baby. Young as the lovers, it is essential for them to bring up the child. (I don’t really get your meaning, for this example.)
Thirdly, (however, on the other hand/ on the contrary ) Opponents of this view argue that the students lose (will miss) various things while they are falling in love. The most significant effect (thing) is that we lose our freedom as dating becomes a vital part in our life. Virtually every time we are hanging out with our lover. (this sentence is not complete.) On the other hand, (What’s more), although college students are physically mature, they are not mentally and emotionally adult (mature) enough to take(shoulder) the responsibility of marriage. In the third place, to our college students, more things are more important than marriage, such as study, work, fulfilling the goal of life, to name but a few. Last but not the least, the one you love in college may not be your suitable "better half" and an early marriage during college life is not always a wise one. Easier you get married, easier you divorced. (this sentence is funny. Haha.)
From my personal perspective, I prefer to the later opinion. As far as I mentioned before, marriage is only part of life, (but) not all of it. For university students,the main task is to study and get fully prepared before stepping into this competitive society. (You’d better add a concluding sentence here, for example, “Thus, I hold the view that being in a relationship for university students is not wise.” ）
these are all my own point of view of edition.
i hope that i can help you.
actually, you did a good job.
it's a pretty good essay.
just try to express the meaning clearer.