求一篇英语作文关于写改正错误方面的建议的,要用到first,then,finally,60字以上是给别人提建议的!

求一篇英语作文
关于写改正错误方面的建议的,要用到first,then,finally,60字以上
是给别人提建议的!

I wish a lot.Five years old when I first desire,which grew to be a great singer.Because of the voice of the kindergarten aunt too good,I still remember.
When I was seven years old,on a first grade was first wish is to grow tall.Because at the age of six,my father took me to the school,the school enrolment of chief said I was so short stature,or wait for a year in some taller.I was very angry,and will have a wish:if you can grow can go to school.
Eight home economic conditions,parents are often a dinner,I also follow a lot,a lot of delicious food is almost a change in one place.HuiQing many people.Then I wish is to eat all the hunters.
Gradually,the home of the kitchen stove,cold and cheerless on a layer after layer of the earth.Parents often late for entertainment and tube,my grades.When I have a wish:I hope that all of the people HuiQing become poor,so parents didn't so much entertainment.
Nine years old when I grew up,drive the parents with less and less.We three home very happy with my parents,everything.I was the best wish is to never grown,lead a happy life.
A thunderbolt -- father's company went bankrupt!A month,father's head appeared a few wisps hair,thin body also has many,mother also very anxious.At this time,my biggest wish is father can quickly find a good job.
I grew up,I already have a year of laughter,become desolate dad.I learn more vigorous,mom more hard work.That's my biggest wish is to hope I can grow quickly,to work,to subsidize home,mom and dad to care for me and let them not to worry about the tuition,don't work for dad.
Through these years,dad found a new job,there is good,and the treatment,and less frequently,and can work with my study.Our family has gradually become energetic,vigor,with laughter.
14 I have second,the study,every day except homework is doing exercises,I almost didn't have a semester,no television showed string.Everyday just two line from school ran home from home to school,and boring.Finally,the winter holiday can.Because mom and dad on work hard,year-end bonus and many of the commission.We changed the color,the little liking for 29 inches of big TV,To my study also bought a thousand multivariate computer,had a happy New Year.Now I wish and hope our home,go back to the past can always happy.
Time flies,suddenly I have fifteen years old,will soon on the third.Suddenly look back,how many days and nights,how many frustrations,how many joys and sorrows,many,many wishes realization.I didn't give up,keep my life's journey,keep my wish...
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I want to make a wish
When blown over the birthday candle,I want to make a wish,but I already blew out candle,like the meteor from my eyes flashed,leaving only regret.
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I want to make a wish,wish I can always remember my friend.Because when I am strong,when I am a new friend is a memory of writing,I might forget my friends,maybe someday we will meet each other,but only by,like never met,even if it's just a smile,also be happened.When the lonely and lonely,memories can bring me great happiness.
I want to make a wish,wish my mom and dad always young and beautiful.Because they will grow old,I will also along with the growth of the age,the independent and gradually away from them,and to create a world belongs to me,but I don't want to let them alone,they can only hope forever young.
I want to make a wish,wish all the teachers can get rid of their occupational disease.Because the teacher put our motherland,nurturing the pillar for our country to give their power,but the teacher will cause some influence occupational many teachers hoarse voice,bending of figure,but also led to the students,teachers' health.
I want to make a wish,wish I could become a writer.Because I was writing,from love of fanaticism first contact it,is it will continue to attract,deeply loves it,the composition of the awards also gave me great confidence,so I have to go in that direction,to struggle!
I want to make a wish,wish everyone's wish can be realized,let every man have his memories of comfort,let the heart.
Although I've blown out candle,but I made in my dream,I want to make a wish,wish I wish can be realized!
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The heart of the corner,so eager to dormant.Along with the growth of the age,we wish with "in".Take me to say,in the 13 years has passed,my desire is kept for the change.
In kindergarten,my brothers and sisters day watching back schoolbag hum songs high school,heart envy:I really want to go to school,they will see what is paradise.Also hope that night,and finally arrived school age,I finally fulfiled,elementary school,into every day with my brother and sisters,after the ass felt perched precariously grow happiness.
Then suddenly one day,my brother's neck with a red triangle scarves.Look brother satisfiedly worryingly,me curiously ask him what it was and brother conceited fool!"said:even this all don't know.I'm telling you,this call red scarf,only the young pioneers to wear.In other words,students can better understand not?".I swear on his comely,also want when young pioneers,wearing the red scarf.I study hard,little to improve their learning,but also help students,teachers' aides.Soon,I got the recognition.The third grade,my neck also squarely wearing that makes me so long triangle scarf.And brother has entered a junior high school.
Time goes,I also into junior high school gate.I was born a new dream - careful I found another chest TuanHui shiny coin.Originally,become league members would mean he is excellent,is good.I also want to have it,also want to be a good young!God helps those who help themselves,and I fulfiled to have a golden TuanHui,glory to join the communist youth league.
I realized another dream,I rejoice,and I myself,it proves I moved is great,as long as I work hard,I have the impossible!Now,I have a new dream that learning,rushed into the heavy high!