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帮我改一篇英语作文,
Hello,everyone.Today l will talk about a popular game :Killers of Three Kingdoms .It is a popular game in China .Many people like playing it.But I think girls don’t like playing it ,because it is a competitive game.I will tell you something about this game .
There are a lot of cards in Killers of Three Kingdoms .There are four roles .They are loyal.lord.robber and traitor .the rules of the game is :first everybody extraction a role .The lord must show his roles cards.The loyal will help lord to kill everybody.Robber must kill the lord .The Traitor’s work is so difficult.He must help lord to kill the robber ,If he success ,then he must kill the lord.
OK,let us to play the game.First,every body Extraction four cards .you can use there cards to kill the people or help yourself.Every round you can get 2 pieces of cards .If you kill the robbers ,you can get 3 pieces of cards .let's play together
Ok.That ‘s all.
帮我改一篇英语作文,Hello,everyone.Today l will talk about a popular g
Hello,everyone.Today,l will talk about a popular game :Killers of Three Kingdoms .It is a popular game in China .Many people like playing it.But I think girls don’t like playing it ,because it is a competitive game.I will tell you something about this game .
There are a lot of cards in Killers of Three Kingdoms .There are four roles .They are loyal.lord.robber and traitor .the rules of the game is QUITE SIMPLE:
First,everybody CAST LOTS TO GET a role .The lord must show his role's cards.The loyal will help lord to kill everybody.Robber must kill the lord .The Traitor’s work is so difficult.He must help lord to kill the robber ,If he succeED ,then he must kill the lord.
OK,let us to play the game.First,everybody DRAWS four cards .you can use theSe cards to kill the people or help yourself.ONCE YOUR TURN,YOU can get 2 pieces of cards .If you kill the robbers ,you can get 3 pieces of cards AS AN EXTRA REWARDING.let's play together
修改的地方都用了大写,删掉了最后一句话,没有什么实际意义,所以不用说,标点有些需要注意,特别是逗号,有时候忘加了.另外extract表示拔出剑之类的东西、榨取、得到或者解压文件,不能表示抽签,文中已经改好了,用cast lots或者draw来表示,整体不错,没什么语法错误,但是表达上多用复合句将会使你的文章更加具有整体性,更加流畅,