神马作文网英语高手帮我修改考研作文.急
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英语高手帮我修改考研作文.急
考研看图作文
具体就是一个人站在海上的船上拿着一张票.另一个人拿着行李站在岸上看着船.
下面有一行字：机遇就像一艘不定期的船,只有准备充分的人才能上船.
As is vividly depicted in the drawing,there is a ship on the sea.One man,holding a ticket,enters into the ship.However,the other who does not have a ticket only can watch the further and further ship with unsatisfied.The caption reads,“Opportunity is like a ship which is only ready for a man with ticket.”
The artist uses this unique metaphor in order to tell us a meaningful philosophy,to make adequate prepares for chances,of life.Many famous people can always turn commonplace things to advantage,and then catch a rare chance.The most persuasive example is Jay Chou,a China-renowned pop music star.Many songs signed by him were not accepted by some stars in the early time.His boss gives him a opportunity to perform these songs by himself.Finally,he catches the chance,and succeeds.
From my perspective,it is necessary for us to make adequate preparations before opportunities coming.Although it may make some people feel boring and ineffective,the huge advantages emerge with the coming of opportunities.（这句感觉太低级了,能不能修改的高级点谢谢!）Only these people with full preparations can hold fast to chances.
有没有能改进的地方,还有建议.
考研看图作文
具体就是一个人站在海上的船上拿着一张票.另一个人拿着行李站在岸上看着船.
下面有一行字：机遇就像一艘不定期的船,只有准备充分的人才能上船.
As is vividly depicted in the drawing,there is a ship on the sea.One man,holding a ticket,enters into the ship.However,the other who does not have a ticket only can watch the further and further ship with unsatisfied.The caption reads,“Opportunity is like a ship which is only ready for a man with ticket.”
The artist uses this unique metaphor in order to tell us a meaningful philosophy,to make adequate prepares for chances,of life.Many famous people can always turn commonplace things to advantage,and then catch a rare chance.The most persuasive example is Jay Chou,a China-renowned pop music star.Many songs signed by him were not accepted by some stars in the early time.His boss gives him a opportunity to perform these songs by himself.Finally,he catches the chance,and succeeds.
From my perspective,it is necessary for us to make adequate preparations before opportunities coming.Although it may make some people feel boring and ineffective,the huge advantages emerge with the coming of opportunities.（这句感觉太低级了,能不能修改的高级点谢谢!）Only these people with full preparations can hold fast to chances.
有没有能改进的地方,还有建议.
You have good vocabulary.You have used words like vividly,metaphor,however,your sentence struature is lousy.Consider my :=
one man,holding a ticket is standing on the departure ship
the other does not have a ticket can only watch the ship sailing futher and further away
to make adequate preparation and not to rely on chance
Many famous people had always turn common idea to their advantage and capture on this to propel themselves to success.
Only these people with full preparation can catch the rare opportunity or chance fast
再问： 你好，谢谢你的建议。 不过我还想请教： ...., to make adequate prepares for chances, of life. 根据你的建议改成 ....,to make adequate preparation and not to rely on chance, of life. 是这样吗？ 我不太确定插入语的用法。插入语，动词不定式可以充当吗？ 还望不吝赐教！ :)
再答： prepares 是动词，preparation 是名词 not to rely on chance，不要依赖机遇
再问： 插入语，动词不定式可以充当吗？
再答： ok
one man,holding a ticket is standing on the departure ship
the other does not have a ticket can only watch the ship sailing futher and further away
to make adequate preparation and not to rely on chance
Many famous people had always turn common idea to their advantage and capture on this to propel themselves to success.
Only these people with full preparation can catch the rare opportunity or chance fast
再问： 你好，谢谢你的建议。 不过我还想请教： ...., to make adequate prepares for chances, of life. 根据你的建议改成 ....,to make adequate preparation and not to rely on chance, of life. 是这样吗？ 我不太确定插入语的用法。插入语，动词不定式可以充当吗？ 还望不吝赐教！ :)
再答： prepares 是动词，preparation 是名词 not to rely on chance，不要依赖机遇
再问： 插入语，动词不定式可以充当吗？
再答： ok