神马作文网急~~急~~!哪位高手帮我修改一下英语作文啊!
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急~~急~~!哪位高手帮我修改一下英语作文啊!
I like sports at present, but I didn’t like it in the past. I became interested in skiing from the year 2006.There was a very big snow in that year. All grounds were covered by snow. It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow. Although I was live in north. To my surprised, my sister decided to take me skiing. I have never skiing. It was too difficult for me. I was very scared. But when I stood on the ski filed, I was deeply impressed by those people flying on the ski filed. They are so free, relax, happy. From that moment I made up my mind to learn skiing. But it was so difficult to me. My sister only tells me one words: Make it by yourself, if I help you, you will not to learn it forever. As a beginner, I don’t know how to use the snowshoe and ski pole. So I’m practiced in a short ski filed. Although I am very careful, I still fallen many times. It’s very sore. I really wanted to give up. But when I saw so many people interest it, I told myself I must learn it and play it very well. After that, I didn’t care about hurt. I practiced repeat. Finally, I can skiing very well. I’m very happy. When I stood the formal ski filed. I’m very excited. When I skiing, the feeling like flying. It made me relax, free. That day is a memorable for me, I’ll never forget it. It told me one words: Nothing is impossible in the world.
I like sports at present, but I didn’t like it in the past. I became interested in skiing from the year 2006.There was a very big snow in that year. All grounds were covered by snow. It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow. Although I was live in north. To my surprised, my sister decided to take me skiing. I have never skiing. It was too difficult for me. I was very scared. But when I stood on the ski filed, I was deeply impressed by those people flying on the ski filed. They are so free, relax, happy. From that moment I made up my mind to learn skiing. But it was so difficult to me. My sister only tells me one words: Make it by yourself, if I help you, you will not to learn it forever. As a beginner, I don’t know how to use the snowshoe and ski pole. So I’m practiced in a short ski filed. Although I am very careful, I still fallen many times. It’s very sore. I really wanted to give up. But when I saw so many people interest it, I told myself I must learn it and play it very well. After that, I didn’t care about hurt. I practiced repeat. Finally, I can skiing very well. I’m very happy. When I stood the formal ski filed. I’m very excited. When I skiing, the feeling like flying. It made me relax, free. That day is a memorable for me, I’ll never forget it. It told me one words: Nothing is impossible in the world.
不是big snow是heavy snow
It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow改为i was
so excited because······
my sister decided to take me skiing.句型take sb to do sth
I have never skiing过去完成时改为i had never
I was very scared scared是由于某样恐怖的东西吓到,这儿应该用afraid
I was deeply impressed by those（who） people flying on the ski filed.
But it was so difficult to me前面你都知道用for为啥这儿要用to
Make it by yourself 改为do it by yourself
if I help you,you will not to learn it forever.should could will 等词后面姐动词原形应该改为you won`t learn forever
As a beginner,改为at the beginning.多记一下短语啊
I don’t know how to use the snowshoe 你只穿一只鞋吗?snowshoes
So I’m practiced in a short ski filed去掉am 动词重复
But when I saw so many people interest it改为but when i saw so many people are interested in it.记住短语,前面你都写对了的啊be interested in
didn’t care about hurt,hurt改为pain.hurt是动词在这儿用名词
I practiced repeat .repeat改为repeatly,practice是动词在这儿需要副词修饰
I’m very happy.i was very happy过去时!
I’m very excited.i was very excited理由同上
When I skiing,the feeling like flying.改为when i am skiing,i feel i am flying.
It made me relax.it made me relaxed注意词的词性
大概我找到的错误就是这些,可能还有我没发现的.但我的建议是,你要读啦.培养自己的语感,你有很多中式句子,只是说你用一个一个英文单词说了出来,并没表达出来.我是中国人我能懂,外国人就会一团雾水啦.
It was so excited that I have never seen the big snow改为i was
so excited because······
my sister decided to take me skiing.句型take sb to do sth
I have never skiing过去完成时改为i had never
I was very scared scared是由于某样恐怖的东西吓到,这儿应该用afraid
I was deeply impressed by those（who） people flying on the ski filed.
But it was so difficult to me前面你都知道用for为啥这儿要用to
Make it by yourself 改为do it by yourself
if I help you,you will not to learn it forever.should could will 等词后面姐动词原形应该改为you won`t learn forever
As a beginner,改为at the beginning.多记一下短语啊
I don’t know how to use the snowshoe 你只穿一只鞋吗?snowshoes
So I’m practiced in a short ski filed去掉am 动词重复
But when I saw so many people interest it改为but when i saw so many people are interested in it.记住短语,前面你都写对了的啊be interested in
didn’t care about hurt,hurt改为pain.hurt是动词在这儿用名词
I practiced repeat .repeat改为repeatly,practice是动词在这儿需要副词修饰
I’m very happy.i was very happy过去时!
I’m very excited.i was very excited理由同上
When I skiing,the feeling like flying.改为when i am skiing,i feel i am flying.
It made me relax.it made me relaxed注意词的词性
大概我找到的错误就是这些,可能还有我没发现的.但我的建议是,你要读啦.培养自己的语感,你有很多中式句子,只是说你用一个一个英文单词说了出来,并没表达出来.我是中国人我能懂,外国人就会一团雾水啦.