求批改英语作文Create a greencampus1、 建设绿色校园十分重要2、 绿色校园不仅指绿色环境3、 为了建

求批改英语作文
Create a greencampus
1、 建设绿色校园十分重要
2、 绿色校园不仅指绿色环境
3、 为了建设绿色校园我们应该……
Create a green campus
In recent years,environmentally friendly societyis always talked between one person to another.campus is a part of society,sowe should create a green campus to respond the society and make our life betterthan before.
Green campus not only means greenenvironment.on the one hand,campus should be planted many trees and flowers tomake it turn into green and beautiful.green campus will make students andteachers live comfortably.one the other hand,green campus require that studentsand teachers should protect the environment ,don’t litter and spit everywhere.
In order to create a green campus we shouldconsider ourselves as the host of our campus and make propaganda for“create a green campus”,packingup the litter you see.finally,planting many trees year by year.
英语极差,渴求进步

1 Create a green campus In recent years, environmentally friendly societyis always talked between one person to another. [教师点评]
[拼写错误] societyis 拼写错误,可替换选项为：society is, society-is, society's
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 create...campus 在教材中出现过 30 次
SeeAlso: make campus11
[学习提示] 易混词汇: create, compose, design, invent, make, produce 均有“创造,制作”之意.
create: 侧重创造出来的东西以前并不存在,或者指独具特色的创作.
compose: 多指音乐或诗歌、画的创作.
design: 主要指在艺术或技术领域的创作设计,强调构思多于实际制造.
invent: 主要用于科技领域,指通过思考、研究或实验制造出新的前所未有、极为有用的东西.
make: 最普通用词,指任何东西的创作或制造.
produce: 指产品的生产,或作品创作的完成.
[批改提示] person表示“人”.注意与people的区别.详情点击
1.2 campus is a part of society, sowe should create a green campus to respond the society and make our life betterthan before. [教师点评]
[低频警示] respond...society 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] betterthan 拼写错误,可替换选项为：better than, better-than, Betteann
[拼写错误] sowe 拼写错误,可替换选项为：so we, so-we, sower
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 create...campus 在教材中出现过 30 次
SeeAlso: make campus11
2.3 Green campus not only means greenenvironment. [教师点评]
[拼写错误] greenenvironment 拼写错误,可替换选项为：green environment, green-environment
[学习提示] 易混词汇: intend, mean 均有“想要,打算”之意.
intend: 较正式用词,但常用,指对未来的行动做出打算,并力争实现.
mean: 口语多用,指怀有作某事的想法或希望得到某物,特别用于效果不好而动机良好的场合.
2.4 on the one hand, campus should be planted many trees and flowers tomake it turn into green and beautiful. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] tomake 拼写错误,可替换选项为：to make, to-make, toymaker
[学习提示] 易混词汇: beautiful, fair, handsome, lovely, pretty, fine 均含“美丽的,漂亮的”之意.
beautiful: 普通用词,含义广泛,语气最强,指优美和谐,是一种几乎接近完美的美.指人时通常形容女人或小孩,很少用于描写男子.
fair: 正式用词,多用于文学中,形容女子和儿童,侧重外表的美.
handsome: 多用于描写男性的英俊潇洒.有时也形容女人,指其五官端正,体态秀丽.
lovely: 普通用词,描写人时,主要指女人和小孩的相貌,语气不如beautiful强.
pretty: 普通用词,语气比beautiful弱,多用于描写妇女、儿童以及小巧玲珑,精美可爱之物.
fine: 指在容貌、身材或风度等方面令人感到可爱.用于事物时,强调形式或内容的优美.
2.5 green campus will make students andteachers live comfortably. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] andteachers 拼写错误,可替换选项为：and teachers, and-teachers, anteaters
[学习提示] 易混词汇: dwell, reside, live, lodge, inhabit, settle 均有“居住,定居”之意.
dwell: 文学上的用词,口语中通常用live代替.
reside: 书面用词,指合法的永久性居住,也指在豪华的住宅里居住.
live: 最普通用词,指固定的居住,可以是长期的,也可以是临时的.
lodge: 指短时间或临时住宿.
inhabit: 强调人或动物居住在某个地区并已适应某种特殊环境.
settle: 侧重指某人定居于城市、国家或地区,而不指居住的住所.
2.6 one the other hand, green campus require that studentsand teachers should protect the environment , don't litter and spit everywhere. [教师点评]
[标点错误] 标点与其前面的单词之间 不应该有空格,请检查
[动词错误] 主谓不一致,请检查green campus require,动词建议用第三人称单数.
[句子错误] 主谓不一致,green campus require不规范,建议修改.
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[拼写错误] studentsand 拼写错误,可替换选项为：student sand, student-sand, students and
3.7 In order to create a green campus we shouldconsider ourselves as the host of our campus and make propaganda for "create a green campus ", packingup the litter you see. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 本句语法不规范,请检查!
[拼写错误] packingup 拼写错误,可替换选项为：packing up, packing-up, packing
[拼写错误] shouldconsider 拼写错误,可替换选项为：should consider, should-consider, shouldest
[搭配统计] 动名搭配 create...campus 在教材中出现过 30 次
SeeAlso: make campus11
[学习提示] 易混词汇: create, compose, design, invent, make, produce 均有“创造,制作”之意.
create: 侧重创造出来的东西以前并不存在,或者指独具特色的创作.
compose: 多指音乐或诗歌、画的创作.
design: 主要指在艺术或技术领域的创作设计,强调构思多于实际制造.
invent: 主要用于科技领域,指通过思考、研究或实验制造出新的前所未有、极为有用的东西.
make: 最普通用词,指任何东西的创作或制造.
produce: 指产品的生产,或作品创作的完成.
3.8 finally, planting many trees year by year. [教师点评]
[句子错误] 请注意句首单词首字母大写
[低频警示] many trees year 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[低频警示] many trees year by year 在语料库中无此用法,疑似中式英语
[学习提示] 易混词汇: at last, at length, eventually, finally, in the end, lastly 均含有“最后,终于”之意.
at last: 多指经主观努力,克服各种困难后才终于达到目的.
at length: 强调经历一段长时间后终于完成,侧重在时间部分.
eventually: 侧重于动作或行为的结果.
finally: 常与at last换用,都可用于对往事的描述,但finally不带感情色彩,指一系列事情的最后结局.
in the end: 与at last同义,但in the end不仅可指“过去”还可表示对“未来”的预计.
lastly: 指连续顺序的最后,通常用在列举事情的场合.
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