神马作文网作为得了15分，麻烦老师在这篇作文基础上修改，再能多得几分就行。
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作为得了15分，麻烦老师在这篇作文基础上修改，再能多得几分就行。
解题思路： 写文章，要留意英语惯用法，以使得表达的比较流利，地道。另外，同一个词，同一个词组，避免重复使用，表达手段要多样化，简单句，复合句交替使用，以使得文章有层次感
解题过程：
1. 首句建议改为:As for me,my birthday party is one of the most important things every year.
2.in my home 这样的表达不地道，建议改为 at home
3.This night ---At night
4. I must eat noodles for luck as a tradition in Chinese改为 I must have noodles for good luck, which is a tradition among Chinese.
5.we also will have big prepare some persant for me? 这句让人费解，看不懂的；我估计你想表达：My friends and my parents will also prepare some presents for me.
6.take part in 不要反复使用，可以用用 join in, participate in 等
7.I am pleasure to hear from you.改为 I will be pleased to hear from you.
解题过程：
1. 首句建议改为:As for me,my birthday party is one of the most important things every year.
2.in my home 这样的表达不地道，建议改为 at home
3.This night ---At night
4. I must eat noodles for luck as a tradition in Chinese改为 I must have noodles for good luck, which is a tradition among Chinese.
5.we also will have big prepare some persant for me? 这句让人费解，看不懂的；我估计你想表达：My friends and my parents will also prepare some presents for me.
6.take part in 不要反复使用，可以用用 join in, participate in 等
7.I am pleasure to hear from you.改为 I will be pleased to hear from you.
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