求英语作文纠正修改Why Should We Learn Foreign LanguagesWith the devel

求英语作文纠正修改
Why Should We Learn Foreign Languages
With the development of society,foreign languages play an increasingly vital role in our daily life.Without foreign languages which are used by different people,we can't understand the difference of culture and history in the world.And foreign languages are extensively used by more and more people.In order to promote the skill to communicate with the foreigners ,learning a foreign language is necessary.
As far as I'm concerned,there is no doubt that foreign languages become an indispensable part of life .First of all,an advantage of foreign languages is that broaden our horizons,and improve our understanding of advanced science and technology .Second,relying on the foreign languages,we can independently to travel round the world .Last but not least,learning foreign languages is not only to cope with the international demand.but also to enhance our comprehensive national strength.Only when we are good at foreign languages ,can we enjoy a more wonderful future.

Without foreign languages which are used by different people,we can't understand the difference of culture and history in the world.
difference后的介词我觉得用in比较好,虽然中文里是文化和历史的区别,但实际上的意思应该是在文化和历史方面的区别.
=> Without foreign languages which are used by different people,we can't understand the difference in culture and history in the world.
In order to promote the skill to communicate with the foreigners,learning a foreign language is necessary.
skill的动词不应该是promote,而是improve.
我们来看一下promote的英英解释：
If people promote something,they help or encourage it to happen,increase,or spread.
If a firm promotes a product,it tries to increase the sales or popularity of that product.
If someone is promoted,they are given a more important job or rank in the organization that they work for.
If a team that competes in a league is promoted,it starts competing in a higher division in the next season because it was one of the most successful teams in the lower division.(BRIT)
可以看到没有一条解释可以让promote和skill搭配使用.
另外,使用in order to的时候,其实这里还是一个不定式,不定式就必然有逻辑主语,所以主句里面的主语最好还是人,人才能improve communication skill.
=> In order to improve the skill to communicate with the foreigners,we need to learn a foreign language.
First of all,an advantage of foreign languages is that broaden our horizons,and improve our understanding of advanced science and technology.
is后面用了that后面应该跟从句啊.后面是一堆动宾短语,那就用不定式吧.
=> First of all,an advantage of foreign languages is to broaden our horizons and improve our understanding of advanced science and technology.
Second,relying on the foreign languages,we can independently to travel round the world.
先把independently拿掉我们看一下,can后面可以跟to do么?can后面是动词原形.
=> Second,relying on the foreign languages,we can independently travel around the world.
Last but not least,learning foreign languages is not only to cope with the international demand.but also to enhance our comprehensive national strength.
中间的句号是打错了吧.既然后面都是不定式,那主语也用不定式,在结构上会更好看.另外demand是meet with.
=> Last but not least,to learn foreign languages is not only to meet with the international demand but also to enhance our comprehensive national strength.
总的来说,作者基础很好,但在细节需要注意.
另外,其实还有一些用词需要推敲,这里我主要陈列我发现的语法问题和明显的中式英语.