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How To Be Happy
Sometimes we may think that happiness is such a faraway thing that we can't touch it.But do you feel happy when you meet an old friend?Do you feel happy when you see someone else smile to you?So in fact,to be happy isn't as difficult as you think.
First,look in the mirror and say to yourself,"I am the best.I can do anything!I'm just a little bit green."It may not sound so good,but it really works.
Second,learn something new.Studying can make you feel happy from the bottom of your heart.If you feel studying is very tiring,just think that patience is bitter,but its fruit is sweet.
Third,be friendly to people you meet.Smile to everyone.When you just smile to the world,you will receive double of that.
Anyway,happiness is with you all the time and the most important thing is that you catch it.
How To Be Happy
Sometimes we may think that happiness is such a faraway thing that we can't touch it.But do you feel happy when you meet an old friend?Do you feel happy when you see someone else smile to you?So in fact,to be happy isn't as difficult as you think.
First,look in the mirror and say to yourself,"I am the best.I can do anything!I'm just a little bit green."It may not sound so good,but it really works.
Second,learn something new.Studying can make you feel happy from the bottom of your heart.If you feel studying is very tiring,just think that patience is bitter,but its fruit is sweet.
Third,be friendly to people you meet.Smile to everyone.When you just smile to the world,you will receive double of that.
Anyway,happiness is with you all the time and the most important thing is that you catch it.
.构思不错,担有几个错误需要指出.
1.Sometimes we may think that happiness is such a faraway thing that we can't touch it.（第一sometimes 与may 的语义有些重复,可以删掉sometimes.第二,touch 后不需要再加it因为定语从句的引导词that已经做了宾语成分.而且不如吧touch 改为reach要来的好.还有你要表达的意思是遥不可及吧,用这个表达方法就更好了at the end of rainbow.)
2.Do you feel happy when you see someone else smile to you?(第一smile 应该改为smiling,第二someone 后没必要加else 你想表达的应该是陌生人的微笑吧,someone else可以改成strangers等）
3.So in fact（两个词取一个就好）
4.to be happy isn't as difficult as you think（这句话中你认为是动词不定式to be happy 作主语,但其实动词不定时是to do 而不是to be 所以这句话没有主语的,你可以用个主语从句that to be happy is ……,只要在to be happy 前加一个that 就好）
4.I can do anything!I'm just a little bit green.（不知道你要表达是不是I am just a little bit blue.green 是有没有经验的意思,但忧郁是blue）
5.just think （think 变成remember)
6.Anyway,happiness is with you all the time and the most important thing is that you catch it.(and 应该改成but标一个转折）
其中还有一些不太恰当的地方,比如最好有名词的可用的不要用动名词.
1.Sometimes we may think that happiness is such a faraway thing that we can't touch it.（第一sometimes 与may 的语义有些重复,可以删掉sometimes.第二,touch 后不需要再加it因为定语从句的引导词that已经做了宾语成分.而且不如吧touch 改为reach要来的好.还有你要表达的意思是遥不可及吧,用这个表达方法就更好了at the end of rainbow.)
2.Do you feel happy when you see someone else smile to you?(第一smile 应该改为smiling,第二someone 后没必要加else 你想表达的应该是陌生人的微笑吧,someone else可以改成strangers等）
3.So in fact（两个词取一个就好）
4.to be happy isn't as difficult as you think（这句话中你认为是动词不定式to be happy 作主语,但其实动词不定时是to do 而不是to be 所以这句话没有主语的,你可以用个主语从句that to be happy is ……,只要在to be happy 前加一个that 就好）
4.I can do anything!I'm just a little bit green.（不知道你要表达是不是I am just a little bit blue.green 是有没有经验的意思,但忧郁是blue）
5.just think （think 变成remember)
6.Anyway,happiness is with you all the time and the most important thing is that you catch it.(and 应该改成but标一个转折）
其中还有一些不太恰当的地方,比如最好有名词的可用的不要用动名词.