请批给我的英语作文 Recently a survey has been conducted

请批给我的英语作文 Recently a survey has been conducted
请批给我的英语作文
Recently a survey has been conducted on how much housework share at home.As we can see in the chart,majorities of the students sometimes do housework for ther family .Only twenty percent of the students always help their parents with housework.
As far as I am concerned ,first,with the one-child policy the government carring out ,people spoilt their children at home,leading the nowadays situations that children at home become little emperor and long for whatever they want .Second,
under the stress of studing ,students have no enough time and energy to spare.Parents even are in charege of most of their children's things,let alone housework.
In my view,we students should spend some time doing housework for our parents .On one hand,we can show our love for our
parents and let they know we have grown up.On the other hand,we can make oureselves relaxed from heavy study

Recently a survey has been conducted on how much housework nowadays students share at home. As we can see in the chart, majorities of the students do housework for their family sometimes.In addition,only twenty percent of the students always help their parents with housework.
As far as I am concerned ,this phenomenon is due to two reasons. first, with the one-child policy the government carring out ,parents spoilt their children at home, leading to the present situation that children ,being called as "little emperors" and "little princesses"do whatever they want at home. Second, under the pressure of studying , students haven't enough time and energy to spare doing housework. Parents realizing this are in charge of most of their children's affairs, let alone housework.
In my view, we students should spend more time doing housework for our parents . On one hand, we can show our love for our parents and show them we have grown up. On the other hand, we can make oureselves relaxed from heavy burden of exams.
再问： 真棒！非常感谢您用心地批改！敢问您现在是做什么的？
再问： 噢，抱歉，我知道了，这是专门给教师或大学生的提问呢
再答： “As we can see in the chart, majorities of the students do housework for their family sometimes.In addition,only twenty percent of the students always help their parents with housework.”还是改成"As we can see in the chart, majorities of the students do housework for their family just a few times.In addition,only twenty percent of the students help their parents with housework frequently."比较好 我是业余学生……