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Tom got a balloon. When he played with it, it flew away and stayed in a tree. Tom was short to get it, he was very anxious and cried. His father came and knew what happened. “It doesn’t matter, I will help you.” Tom’s father said. But Tom’s father was scant to get it down. So he threw his hat upward because he wanted to use his hat let the balloon down. And the hat was covered the balloon in the tree! 以前老师帮我改过作文，很喜欢老师的批改风格，这次又请老师帮我改一篇。错误的地方请老师用红色字体标 明，若内容简单还请老师补充，谢谢！
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解题过程：
Tom got a balloon. When he played with it, it flew away and stayed in a tree.
Tom was short to get it, he was very anxious and cried. His father came and knew what happened. “It doesn’t matter, I will help you.” Tom’s father said. But Tom’s father was scant to get it down. So he threw his hat upward because he wanted to use his hat let the balloon down. And the hat was covered the balloon in the tree!
1、改为too short to get it。Too……to……“太……而不能……”
2、 前面是逗号，因此这里缺少连词，加上so
3、 用词缺少准确，建议改为1中的too short to……
4、 use his hat to let，加上to表示目的状语，“为了……”
5、 cover的意思是“盖上”，所以was要去掉。 还有一个表达：be covered with……“被……所覆盖”
总体感觉：叙述连贯，用词较准确，词汇量丰富，有高级句型。
如对本题解答还有疑问，可在“继续讨论”中留言，我收到后会尽快给你答复。
谢谢你的配合！匆忙中难免有疏漏，请多包涵哦。我是菁菁草老师，随时为你答疑解惑!
英语的诀窍就是熟练，办法是多背多练。加油吧！Do your best and you can do the best!
最终答案：略
解题过程：
Tom got a balloon. When he played with it, it flew away and stayed in a tree.
Tom was short to get it, he was very anxious and cried. His father came and knew what happened. “It doesn’t matter, I will help you.” Tom’s father said. But Tom’s father was scant to get it down. So he threw his hat upward because he wanted to use his hat let the balloon down. And the hat was covered the balloon in the tree!
1、改为too short to get it。Too……to……“太……而不能……”
2、 前面是逗号，因此这里缺少连词，加上so
3、 用词缺少准确，建议改为1中的too short to……
4、 use his hat to let，加上to表示目的状语，“为了……”
5、 cover的意思是“盖上”，所以was要去掉。 还有一个表达：be covered with……“被……所覆盖”
总体感觉：叙述连贯，用词较准确，词汇量丰富，有高级句型。
如对本题解答还有疑问，可在“继续讨论”中留言，我收到后会尽快给你答复。
谢谢你的配合！匆忙中难免有疏漏，请多包涵哦。我是菁菁草老师，随时为你答疑解惑!
英语的诀窍就是熟练，办法是多背多练。加油吧！Do your best and you can do the best!
最终答案：略