神马作文网求大神帮我看一下有什么语病.
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求大神帮我看一下有什么语病.
可能语病比较多.老师要求一般现在时
On national day,I do many interesting things.
At 7 a.m.,Iwake up and wash my face.Before breakfast,I run around my estate.In the morning,my dad and I go to gym,we play badminton with others.After lunch,I napping because I go to the beach and swim in the sea in the afternoon.It takes me strength so Imust have good rest.In the afternoon,I swim.Suddenly,a big wave upset me.I have to drink alot of seawater.Oh,it's too salty.
I have a good time on national holiday.
可能语病比较多.老师要求一般现在时
On national day,I do many interesting things.
At 7 a.m.,Iwake up and wash my face.Before breakfast,I run around my estate.In the morning,my dad and I go to gym,we play badminton with others.After lunch,I napping because I go to the beach and swim in the sea in the afternoon.It takes me strength so Imust have good rest.In the afternoon,I swim.Suddenly,a big wave upset me.I have to drink alot of seawater.Oh,it's too salty.
I have a good time on national holiday.
1）要用过去式
2）时间的排序有些怪和重复 （帮你改了）
On national day, I did many interesting things.
At 7 a.m., I woke up and washed my face.
Before breakfast, I ran around my estate. （estate形容的是庄园或财产）（如果是公寓,用apartment - 如果是别墅,用house）
After that,my dad and I went to gym,we played badminton with other people.
After lunch,I took a nap because I went to the beach and swam in the sea in the afternoon.
It used up my energy so I must have a good rest.
While I was swimming, a big wave spashed over and knocked me over, which caused me to drink a lot of sea water.
Oh, it's so salty.
再问： 好吧。其实我觉得写一般现在时我写的很别扭。选你了。
2）时间的排序有些怪和重复 （帮你改了）
On national day, I did many interesting things.
At 7 a.m., I woke up and washed my face.
Before breakfast, I ran around my estate. （estate形容的是庄园或财产）（如果是公寓,用apartment - 如果是别墅,用house）
After that,my dad and I went to gym,we played badminton with other people.
After lunch,I took a nap because I went to the beach and swam in the sea in the afternoon.
It used up my energy so I must have a good rest.
While I was swimming, a big wave spashed over and knocked me over, which caused me to drink a lot of sea water.
Oh, it's so salty.
再问： 好吧。其实我觉得写一般现在时我写的很别扭。选你了。