神马作文网求英语作文进一步改进~（高三以上水平者进,乱改的别瞎掺合）
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求英语作文进一步改进~（高三以上水平者进,乱改的别瞎掺合）
话题概括一下就是：谈谈你对当代青少年追求标新立异,与众不同的看法.
下面是我写的,这作文要拿去参加个比赛的.
我觉得写的好烂啊,
My view of being unique
Nowadays,more and more teenagers want to appear unique .They prefer to wear
strange clothes ,listen to unusual music ,and even do silly things to make themselves
different .Because they think that being unique is a fashion ,it can leave a deep
impression on people ,and maybe in this way they can be famous.
As to whether it is worthwhile to be unique ,however,people hold different
attitudes .Some people are willing to be ordinary ,they are glad to live peacefully.
But teenagers have their own opinions .They think the world is a large stage ,if we
want to stand out ,we should try our best to be unique .{ On the other hand ,a majority
of parents don't think so.Although they want their children to be unique ,it means to
be outstanding .So we have to study all the time .Only in this way could we get
excellent grades.}
To be honest ,I agree with those parents.Doing unique things and being different
from others isn't the true uniqueness .In my view ,if we could develop our specialities ,
and do well in some fields ,being unique is the way to success .The reasons are as
follows .First ,now we are entering a new century ,full of opportunities and challenges.
Second ,it is said that two leaves are not exactly the same to each other in the world .
Just think of Jay Chou .He is a singer who is not handsome at all.But he gives the new
sense to R＆B music ,using his unique traditional chinese style .What's more ,his
unique lyrics and melodies make me feel at ease .It is his musical talent that leads
him to success .We all have our own specialities ,so why not hold opportunities and
show ourselves to the world In order to be unique ,we still have a lot more to do.
We should no longer waste our present time.
In conclusion ,everyone has his own way to live a life .Be unique ,work hard ,
on our own goals ,and walk along the way we have choosen,we will get close to success.
1.第二段大括号内内容老师说文不对题,我不知怎么改.我想表达的是真正的与众不同在于在某个方面做的出色,这才是父母希望我们做的.
2.这篇文章还有错误么,有的话回答的时候麻烦复制下原文在中间空的一行注明一下;
3.我才疏学浅,况且第一次写这么长的英语作文,实在是尽力了.
虽然老师不看好我去参加比赛.可是我还是很要强,想试试.
有什么高级的用法啦句子啦可以改进我的作文,也欢迎改在下面.
4.我写了好多and啊,and,and ,and ,读着就挫啊,换几个掉要咋办?
好了,大家综合改进吧.万谢 ..快.
楼下香辣小小蟹,你什么水平,错误越改越多了吧.
文章先前已经给老师看过了,语法错误已基本改过来了.
还有你叫我删删删,字数不够你赔我啊,只能增不能减!
话题概括一下就是：谈谈你对当代青少年追求标新立异,与众不同的看法.
下面是我写的,这作文要拿去参加个比赛的.
我觉得写的好烂啊,
My view of being unique
Nowadays,more and more teenagers want to appear unique .They prefer to wear
strange clothes ,listen to unusual music ,and even do silly things to make themselves
different .Because they think that being unique is a fashion ,it can leave a deep
impression on people ,and maybe in this way they can be famous.
As to whether it is worthwhile to be unique ,however,people hold different
attitudes .Some people are willing to be ordinary ,they are glad to live peacefully.
But teenagers have their own opinions .They think the world is a large stage ,if we
want to stand out ,we should try our best to be unique .{ On the other hand ,a majority
of parents don't think so.Although they want their children to be unique ,it means to
be outstanding .So we have to study all the time .Only in this way could we get
excellent grades.}
To be honest ,I agree with those parents.Doing unique things and being different
from others isn't the true uniqueness .In my view ,if we could develop our specialities ,
and do well in some fields ,being unique is the way to success .The reasons are as
follows .First ,now we are entering a new century ,full of opportunities and challenges.
Second ,it is said that two leaves are not exactly the same to each other in the world .
Just think of Jay Chou .He is a singer who is not handsome at all.But he gives the new
sense to R＆B music ,using his unique traditional chinese style .What's more ,his
unique lyrics and melodies make me feel at ease .It is his musical talent that leads
him to success .We all have our own specialities ,so why not hold opportunities and
show ourselves to the world In order to be unique ,we still have a lot more to do.
We should no longer waste our present time.
In conclusion ,everyone has his own way to live a life .Be unique ,work hard ,
on our own goals ,and walk along the way we have choosen,we will get close to success.
1.第二段大括号内内容老师说文不对题,我不知怎么改.我想表达的是真正的与众不同在于在某个方面做的出色,这才是父母希望我们做的.
2.这篇文章还有错误么,有的话回答的时候麻烦复制下原文在中间空的一行注明一下;
3.我才疏学浅,况且第一次写这么长的英语作文,实在是尽力了.
虽然老师不看好我去参加比赛.可是我还是很要强,想试试.
有什么高级的用法啦句子啦可以改进我的作文,也欢迎改在下面.
4.我写了好多and啊,and,and ,and ,读着就挫啊,换几个掉要咋办?
好了,大家综合改进吧.万谢 ..快.
楼下香辣小小蟹,你什么水平,错误越改越多了吧.
文章先前已经给老师看过了,语法错误已基本改过来了.
还有你叫我删删删,字数不够你赔我啊,只能增不能减!
My view of being unique
Quantity of teenagers who are willing to have an unique appearance , has been shown with an increasing trend in recent years. These people prefer to wear strange clothes with unusual music from their mp3 or some other sorts of players. They even perform tasks in silly ways to ensure that they are known as unusual youngsters. Being unique is supposed to be a fashion in such young people's mind, which could lead to a deep impression from other people's point of view. Nevertheless, certain people within this crateria became well known after all.
As to whether it is really worthwhile to be unique , however, divergence had been shown amoung the public. Some people prefer to be ordinary , they enjoy peaceful life. Parents, on the other hand, understand outstanding performance of children as unique, which is one of reasons why we must study all the time.In this case, teenagers have got their own opinions . World is understood as a large stage inside their mind. We would indeed try our best, if we have any wish to stand out.
To be honest ,I agree with majority of parents. Doing unique things and being different from others is indeed not uniqueness at all. In my point of view , if we are able to develop our own specialities ,
and do well in certain fields , being unique is the path towards success. Reasons are as follows.
The very first reason is that we have just entered into a new century , with full of opportunities and challenges. This will need
us to perform as perfect as possible in any area we prefer to.
Second ,it is said that any two leaves on earth would never be identical to each other. One obvious example in this case is Jay Chou .He is a singer who is not handsome at all. But he gives new senses to R＆B music ,using his unique traditional chinese style. His unique lyrics and melodies made a lot of people, including me to feel at ease .It is his own talent of music that leads him to success. Every single person in this world have got their own specialities. Therefore, it is of course right to hold opportunities and show ourselves to the world. In order to be unique, we still have a long way to go. We should no longer waste our present time.
In conclusion , every person has a special way to live a life . Be unique ,work hard on our own goals ,and walk along the way we have choosen, we will get closer and closer to success.
你用的某些词汇我不得不说有待改善,我改完以后意思完全没变,只不过某些地方的遣词造句可以说是面目全非.有些地方你自己可以考虑进一步改善,我还是要建议你加强对语感的培养.
Quantity of teenagers who are willing to have an unique appearance , has been shown with an increasing trend in recent years. These people prefer to wear strange clothes with unusual music from their mp3 or some other sorts of players. They even perform tasks in silly ways to ensure that they are known as unusual youngsters. Being unique is supposed to be a fashion in such young people's mind, which could lead to a deep impression from other people's point of view. Nevertheless, certain people within this crateria became well known after all.
As to whether it is really worthwhile to be unique , however, divergence had been shown amoung the public. Some people prefer to be ordinary , they enjoy peaceful life. Parents, on the other hand, understand outstanding performance of children as unique, which is one of reasons why we must study all the time.In this case, teenagers have got their own opinions . World is understood as a large stage inside their mind. We would indeed try our best, if we have any wish to stand out.
To be honest ,I agree with majority of parents. Doing unique things and being different from others is indeed not uniqueness at all. In my point of view , if we are able to develop our own specialities ,
and do well in certain fields , being unique is the path towards success. Reasons are as follows.
The very first reason is that we have just entered into a new century , with full of opportunities and challenges. This will need
us to perform as perfect as possible in any area we prefer to.
Second ,it is said that any two leaves on earth would never be identical to each other. One obvious example in this case is Jay Chou .He is a singer who is not handsome at all. But he gives new senses to R＆B music ,using his unique traditional chinese style. His unique lyrics and melodies made a lot of people, including me to feel at ease .It is his own talent of music that leads him to success. Every single person in this world have got their own specialities. Therefore, it is of course right to hold opportunities and show ourselves to the world. In order to be unique, we still have a long way to go. We should no longer waste our present time.
In conclusion , every person has a special way to live a life . Be unique ,work hard on our own goals ,and walk along the way we have choosen, we will get closer and closer to success.
你用的某些词汇我不得不说有待改善,我改完以后意思完全没变,只不过某些地方的遣词造句可以说是面目全非.有些地方你自己可以考虑进一步改善,我还是要建议你加强对语感的培养.