大侠,您看看Ifchild want to do well in school, parents should limi

大侠,您看看
If
child want to do well in school, parents should limit the hours of watching TV
programs or movies.
When it comes to the topic that whether students
should be limited to watch TV and movies for the sake of doing better in
school, the opinions may vary from person to person. There exist strong voices
opposites the limitation saying that TV and movies can amuse the students and then
relieve their pressure from the study.
However, another voice, supports the parents to limit the hours that
their children spending on the TV and movies because they think there are
better ways to relax. For me, the latter one seems more reasonable.
Initially, I have to point out a crucial
fact that current TVs and movies contains too much information that would do
harm to the young people. In order to attract more attention, the movies and TV
programs producers are willing to add some sexy or violence scenes, and thus,
it is not surprising to see a movie filled with blood, guns, and killings.
Then, when the young man, who are more likely to be influenced, see such
violent scenes, would be more possibly to behave violently. In a long run, it
obviously would obstacle them to concentrate on the study.
In addition, I admit the students
especially the ones will accept the college entrance exams, need to do some
relaxation to remove their mental pressure. While, it does not mean they should
spend much time sitting in front of the TVs. There are many other activities
that not only can help the students to relax themselves but also do benefit to
mental and physical health. For example, reading books is a good habit that can
entertain the children and instill advantageous ideas or principles simultaneously.
Besides, parents could also take the child to have a picnic on weekend, after a
week’s hard-working, the child must want to breathe the fresh air and have a comfortable
conversation.
Whereas, not all TV programs and movies
are harmful to the students. In my perspective, it is necessary for the
children to watch international news because it can help them to know what
happened in the world every day, at the same time watching news programs would improve
the children’s vocabulary ability unconsciously. Furthermore, some science
programs are good choices too. For me, the favorite TV program is Animal world
which mainly describe different kinds of special animals in this planet. I am
so fascinated about it that I gained much interesting on the biology courses in
the school.
In
sum, from what I have discussed above, we can safely draw a conclusion that
though some TV programs and movies can positively influence the children,
spending too much time on it is certainly harmful due to the negative
information. Hence, the parents should limit the time that their children spend
on the TVs and movies, at the meantime; they need provide other healthy ways
for their children to relax.

中规中矩,3－4分吧（5分满分,如果错别字少些,就是4分）
好句子不多,但这不重要.说这个是为了告诉你好文章不一定要有华丽的句子,关键是观点要实际.
你的这种对比的写法好处在于能说清两面,缺点在于,说不透.所以,很容易出现一种现像,就是你想总体上“支持”,但却一不小心把“不支持”的原因写得很好,因为对英文的把握不稳定.
当然,我是建议只写一个写透,这样可以弥补一些问题,比如句子不够精彩,不够华丽,单词比较单一等等.
但是既然你比较偏好这种两面的写法,500词想说清楚两面,我觉得重点在于找一个有代表性的、极端的例子作为你所支持的观点,再对反面观点进行说理,而不举例子,这样有助于你的正面例子能一下打垮反面例子.
最极端的例子,就是说故事了,血腥点,暴力点都行.但是你的这几段都是“讲道理”,没有任何真实性,所以不够打动人.
鉴于你主要支持少看电视,那么,就是一个极端的例子说明,电视看多了有多么恐怖；另一个例子比较客观的总结一下电视的好处.
反对看电视的极端的例子：我女朋友天天拉着我看该死的韩剧和日剧,结果使得我没有时间学习,大学经常挂科.更糟糕的是,有一种叫做Xbox的东西,让电视增加了魔力,结果我毕业之后工作都很难找到,而且还戴上了眼镜,我是我家唯一一个戴眼镜的!血的教训告诉我,电视一定不能看太多.
好的方面：简单总结一下电视的客观性,比如电视能有广告,能有新闻,能不花钱看电影.
但是最终你要把好的一方面变成坏的那方面,那就是：如今的广告全是裸女,新闻全是暴力,电影也往往都是一些没有任何营养的快餐.
总结：科技没有好和坏.但关键是人们如何利用.电视也如此.我不喜欢现在的电视节目,因为他的内容以及危害远远大于他的好的用途.那么,在“有关人士”觉醒前,我呼吁,大家少看电视,多上网.