神马作文网New concept Englsh 2 ,第19课 摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.
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New concept Englsh 2 ,第19课 摘要写作.求英语前辈们点评一下.
The play was going to begin at any moment.I asked for two tickets.There were not any left.Susan and me were disappointed.A man hurried to the ticket-office just then.He returned two tickets.They were for next Wednesday’s performance.I bought them.
The play was going to begin at any moment.I asked for two tickets.There were not any left.Susan and me were disappointed.A man hurried to the ticket-office just then.He returned two tickets.They were for next Wednesday’s performance.I bought them.
1,别总是用一种句式,尤其全部都是简单句.
2,尝试着用一些从句或多一些表情感的词语类,可以让句子更丰富更富有情感.
3,句子之间试着用一些连词衔接,这样上下句子意思会更连贯
第三句有点小错误：But there isn't any ticket left.如果是我,我可能会直接说：There's nothing left.这样更简洁些.
第四句有点小错误,改为：Susan and I.
你再试着按照我说的,修改下看看效果.
2,尝试着用一些从句或多一些表情感的词语类,可以让句子更丰富更富有情感.
3,句子之间试着用一些连词衔接,这样上下句子意思会更连贯
第三句有点小错误：But there isn't any ticket left.如果是我,我可能会直接说：There's nothing left.这样更简洁些.
第四句有点小错误,改为：Susan and I.
你再试着按照我说的,修改下看看效果.