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请求英语作文修改
Today,I received a foreign child.He is frendly and polite.I got up at seven o' clock A.M.I bought a exquisite present.Than I went with my mother to my foreign friend's house.I gave tihs present for him at nine at 9.00 o' clock A.M.My mother and his mother were talking abot some studies,and we were talking about our hobbies.He said his favourite hobbies is play the piano and play badminton.So he led me to his Music Room.We played the piano at one 0' clock P.M.He can play the paino very well.He taught me a lot of piano skills.After this,we played badminton at 3:30 P.M.His father is a badminton player,so he is very good at this.He played better than I.We all had a good time.
请求英语作文修改Today,I received a foreign child.He is frendly and p
哈哈 碰到我算你运气好了.我来看看哦.
这里有几个建议:
1.你的第3句话跟第4句话连在一起会比较好一点,比较顺口.中间加个"and"
就好了,改了以后是:I got up at seven o' clock A.M. and I bought a exquisite(exquisite=精美) present.
2.你的第5句话“Than I went with my mother to my foreign friend's house”有两个地方错,分别是这句话的第一个字“than”要改成“then”(这两个字很容易搞混).第二个错,就是顺序不对,它应该是“then I went to my foreign friend's house with my mother”.
3.“I gave tihs present for him at nine at 9.00 o' clock A.M.”这句话 应该改为:“i gave this present to him at 9:00 o'clock”.这句话里面有很多多余的,还有一个字用错了.因为,有了"at nine",就不需要9.00 A.M.或者o'clock了.其实说9点 有3种方法,分别是:9 o'clock,9A.M.,还有"at nine"
4."My mother and his mother were talking abot some studies"这句话只是拼错而已,abot要改为about
5."He said his favourite hobbies is play the piano and play badminton"
应该改为"he said his favourite hobbies are playing piano and badminton".记住,1个的东西就要用"is",2个或以上的就要用"are".
6.“We played the piano at one 0' clock P.M.”,这句话又是错在多余的地方,我在上面有讲过说明时间的3种方法.这句话应该改为"we played the piano at midnight."(如果你想说半夜12点的话,那就是midnight)
7.“He played better than I”应该改为“he played better than me"
恩.就这些了,选我吧,我花了好多时间
我从小就读国际学校 所以英文很好.