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i am not interested in superstar,but I am a idolater for businessman..such as Steve Jobs,who is a CEO & founder of Apple company.
Actually,Jobs was abandoned by his parents since he was born and became a orphan.Fortunately he was adopted by a kind family.
Jobs lives at silicon valley when he was young and was interested in electric productions.
IN 1977,jobs found the apple with his parterner.
As we known
Apple is famous for its great design and high quality.So,people are proud of have own apple.
There is no doubte that the success of apple belongs to jobs.
Jobs is more than a business man and also a perfect arist.
That’s all.Thank you
i am not interested in superstar,but I am a idolater for businessman..such as Steve Jobs,who is a CEO & founder of Apple company.
Actually,Jobs was abandoned by his parents since he was born and became a orphan.Fortunately he was adopted by a kind family.
Jobs lives at silicon valley when he was young and was interested in electric productions.
IN 1977,jobs found the apple with his parterner.
As we known
Apple is famous for its great design and high quality.So,people are proud of have own apple.
There is no doubte that the success of apple belongs to jobs.
Jobs is more than a business man and also a perfect arist.
That’s all.Thank you
idolater for 中的for改为of
IN 1977,jobs found 改为 founded
Jobs is more than a business man 改为 Jobs is not only a business man
IN 1977,jobs found 改为 founded
Jobs is more than a business man 改为 Jobs is not only a business man