英语高手来看看这两段话有什么问题么?写作文遇到点问题TAT
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英语高手来看看这两段话有什么问题么?写作文遇到点问题TAT
Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
Recently,we had an investigation on all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school about the phenomenon about having no breakfast and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
哪个正确呢?还是都不对?那里有问题麻烦说下,
Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
Recently,we had an investigation on all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school about the phenomenon about having no breakfast and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast .
哪个正确呢?还是都不对?那里有问题麻烦说下,
第一个感觉更好一点.第一句太长了,可以加个逗号
Recently,we had and investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school,and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast.
但这样感觉上,还是有点重复了,因为二年级的学生不吃饭的现象,这个现象重复讲了两次,就是do not have breakfast这个现象,重复了两次以后,就觉得这句话挺繁琐的,不过还是正确的.
我会改成:Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon whether all the Senior Grade 2 students have breakfast in our school,the result shows that half of students do not have breakfast.
第二句里用了三个ABOUT...实在是很奇怪,而且很不合适.
Recently,we had and investigation of the phenomenon about having no breakfast in all the Senior Grade 2 students in our school,and the result shows that about half of the students do not have breakfast.
但这样感觉上,还是有点重复了,因为二年级的学生不吃饭的现象,这个现象重复讲了两次,就是do not have breakfast这个现象,重复了两次以后,就觉得这句话挺繁琐的,不过还是正确的.
我会改成:Recently,we had an investigation of the phenomenon whether all the Senior Grade 2 students have breakfast in our school,the result shows that half of students do not have breakfast.
第二句里用了三个ABOUT...实在是很奇怪,而且很不合适.