雅思作文批改,中国式英语很急啊,我打5.5就够了.

雅思作文批改,中国式英语很急啊,我打5.5就够了.
题目如今报纸在人们获取idea的时候越来越重要为啥呢,你认为这是indesirable ordesirable
Nowdays nespaper is playing an extremly significant role in our daily life .i think there are several reasons leading to it.
In terms of nespaper,absolutely,it is cheap,which compare to the same media such as tv ,computer or magazines etc.Moreover,there is more information on it than before,through the newspaper you can easily get the ideas and opnions you want..Futhermore,today is a information overload day,people call on nespaper ,which is cheap,objective,authorities .
Althought ,the nespaper do supplys individuals a vital way to have enormous ideas and opnions,there are a vast amount weakness the newspaper have .
First of all,to compare with the computer and tv ,is not audio visual,you just know the information from only a few pictures and some poor words.for instance,like the mud rock flw in zhouqiu thie time,you would not know how hard the policeman aid the local peoper ,which you would not realize the state ment so vividly.
Moreover,there are increasily advertisement on it,which means more time we would spend on the monotonous ad and hardly get real information we want.
Furthermore,we do use others ideasfrom newspaper and ignore the time which we think by ourselves.It can bring the problem that indepentent thinking is decreasing day by day .A vast amount people will lose the way they juge the news and conformism to the free speech whatever it is ture or flase.
To sum up,Even though a great help the nespaper gives us ,the promblem it also has we should look at both side .

第三行which compare to改为comparing to.
泥石流的表达方式是mudslides,所以正确的说法是like the mudslides in Zhouqu this time.
local people 建议改成victims,译成遇难者更为贴切.
最后一段可改动一句,Even though a lot the newspaper gives us.
以上仅供参考,如有异议,欢迎切磋.