神马作文网帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有什么问题,英语好的请进
来源：学生作业帮 编辑：神马作文网作业帮 分类：英语作业 时间：2024/11/19 09:18:59
帮我看一下我写的这篇英语文章有什么问题,英语好的请进
Dear Liu Yun,
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother,but I hope to have one.I have a small family,but it is coziness.There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in school.She is slightly fat,but she is very optimistic.She often say:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.And my father is a boss.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after one's father.He likes basketball very much,he is a loyal fans.I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.What about you?
要赶快呢！明天要交的 我都是自己写的呢，而且是第一次提问，我还很小，不知道自己语法啊句子方面有没有问题的，哥哥姐姐们帮帮 多帮我挑挑语病哦
Dear Liu Yun,
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother,but I hope to have one.I have a small family,but it is coziness.There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in school.She is slightly fat,but she is very optimistic.She often say:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.And my father is a boss.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after one's father.He likes basketball very much,he is a loyal fans.I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.What about you?
要赶快呢！明天要交的 我都是自己写的呢，而且是第一次提问，我还很小，不知道自己语法啊句子方面有没有问题的，哥哥姐姐们帮帮 多帮我挑挑语病哦
Dear Liu Yun,
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.
这句话中：English要大写.
I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,
这句话之后要句号.
Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother,but I hope to have one.I have a small family,but it is coziness.
"coziness"是名词,你这儿应该用形容词cozy 或 warm.
There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in school.
She works in a shool.否则,in shcool是“在求学”的意思.
She is slightly fat,but she is very optimistic.She often say:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.
She often says：要在say之后,加s,因为是第三人称单数.
And my father is a boss.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after one's father.
I take after him.不要写one's father.
He likes basketball very much,he is a loyal fans.
he is a loyal fan.用单数,因为是he is a ..
I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.What about you?
应该是drawing pictures,不是drewing.
改错到此.说说我的个人观点,你是一个小学五年级的学生,能写出这样的英语文章,真是不错.但我建议你：如果你喜欢英语,一定要多读多看一些国外人写的文章（可以从“英语儿童文学入手”http://www.magickeys.com/books/index.html#books.）这样,你的写作才能从本质上提高.
祝好运啦!
Hi!I am Xu Xinyi.Anne is my english name.I am happy to have a new pen pal.
这句话中：English要大写.
I live in Ningbo with my mom and dad,
这句话之后要句号.
Ningbo is a beautiful city.Welcome to Ningbo!I don't have a sister or brother,but I hope to have one.I have a small family,but it is coziness.
"coziness"是名词,你这儿应该用形容词cozy 或 warm.
There are three people in my family--father,mother and me.My mother is a teacher.She works in school.
She works in a shool.否则,in shcool是“在求学”的意思.
She is slightly fat,but she is very optimistic.She often say:"laugh and be fat."She likes listening to music.
She often says：要在say之后,加s,因为是第三人称单数.
And my father is a boss.He is very tall and thin.I love my father,because I take after one's father.
I take after him.不要写one's father.
He likes basketball very much,he is a loyal fans.
he is a loyal fan.用单数,因为是he is a ..
I like riding my bike and drewing pictures.What about you?
应该是drawing pictures,不是drewing.
改错到此.说说我的个人观点,你是一个小学五年级的学生,能写出这样的英语文章,真是不错.但我建议你：如果你喜欢英语,一定要多读多看一些国外人写的文章（可以从“英语儿童文学入手”http://www.magickeys.com/books/index.html#books.）这样,你的写作才能从本质上提高.
祝好运啦!