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请给我的cet6作文打个分!
请指出缺点,和得分点,若能polish一下更好.
作文题为
1.有些人认为,遗传作用起决定性作用
2.有些人认为环境影响更大
3.你的观点
我的文章：
according to a recent survey,about 78% of children are more like their parents.As a result,Many people believe that gene is of great importance to human's success.
however,other people do not agree.They suggest that only by hard work can we make progress and abtain achievement.as the old proverb says:"no pains,no gains.",these people claim that anybody which is blind to personal effort could not achieve success.
Between the two point above,I agree with the latter one.It is education and study,a matter of effort,that urge you success.So do not trust gene,even it could give you partly assistance.
能不能帮着修改一下！感激不尽！
请指出缺点,和得分点,若能polish一下更好.
作文题为
1.有些人认为,遗传作用起决定性作用
2.有些人认为环境影响更大
3.你的观点
我的文章：
according to a recent survey,about 78% of children are more like their parents.As a result,Many people believe that gene is of great importance to human's success.
however,other people do not agree.They suggest that only by hard work can we make progress and abtain achievement.as the old proverb says:"no pains,no gains.",these people claim that anybody which is blind to personal effort could not achieve success.
Between the two point above,I agree with the latter one.It is education and study,a matter of effort,that urge you success.So do not trust gene,even it could give you partly assistance.
能不能帮着修改一下！感激不尽！
According to a recent survey,about 78% children'character are just like their parents'.As a result,many people believe that gene is of great importance to human's success.
However,other people do not agree with this idea.They suggest that only by hard work can we make progress and abtain achievement.Just as the old proverb says:"no pains,no gains.",these people claim that anybody which is blind to personal effort could not achieve success.
Between the two point above,I agree with the latter one.It is education and study,a matter of effort,that urge you success.So you can not trust gene,even it could give you partly assistance.
我修改了一下哈,
However,other people do not agree with this idea.They suggest that only by hard work can we make progress and abtain achievement.Just as the old proverb says:"no pains,no gains.",these people claim that anybody which is blind to personal effort could not achieve success.
Between the two point above,I agree with the latter one.It is education and study,a matter of effort,that urge you success.So you can not trust gene,even it could give you partly assistance.
我修改了一下哈,